Still Winter

Dead Winter Stray~ By: Poet Destroyer

Nearby paces, Combatants lost under the cemetery walls,
“Blessed Men and Heavenly Remedy Women of Ages,”
Feelings of dance at the beginning of nightfall,
Scenery of fire, sadness passing this history page,
In that distant curve, somewhere nears the sundown stream.
Far away from the vision of mortal eyes,
A child plays as beautiful and pale like the sunrise.
She plays on the coast this beautiful but pale, sun raised child.
Pursuing nature, in a hushed angelic lucidity,
“In hushed angelic lucidity!”
Fragile fastened, to those adequate bones.
Profound deepness beneath the snow winder dust,
Below the memoirs of her floating vessel,
Reminisces of water drowning down rivers and streams,
A shattered female kneels in salvation.
An anvil so heavy it troubles the mind.
Lost in profoundness, in what might have been.
What was, for a moment in this period?
The grimness of her weak vessel dwells.
A lifeless winter strays around. 
An album so old and dusty,
A christening gown not ever embraced.
Infinite, the woman and pale child of sunrise,
Soften footfalls beating out the torments.
Countless nights seeing the day of unspoken headstones,
Feelings of dance will never rest this heartache.
Eternity, in a dance of unconditional need,
Their hearts unite as one...
A closing of mother and child…     
~BY: PD~

Dead Winter~ By: Catie Lindsey 

There walks Warriors in that graveyard,
Holy Men and Medicine Women of ages;
at night you can see their Spirits dance,
setting fire to history's pages.
In that far corner, up by the stream,
far from the eyes of publicity,
she plays on the shore, beautiful Raylene,
catching poly-wogs, in silent lucidity.
In silent lucidity.
Brittle now, those fine bones,
deep beneath the snow drifts of winter,
beneath the memories of her body afloat
down rivers and streams of Remember.
A broken woman kneels in prayer,
a heavy weight on a burdened mind,
somewhere deep in what could have been,
what was, for a moment in time.
The grayness of her frail body lingers,
in a dead winter of the unborn,
on page forty-nine in the family album,
in a baptismal gown never worn.
Together they dance,the woman and the child,
their soft footfalls pounding out the sorrows
of many days at a worn out headstone,
many dances to come, many tomorrows.
Together they dance, The Woman's Dance,
their hearts as one...
the woman and the child.
~By: Catie Lindsey~

(for Catie's: Re-write contest..)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 3/17/2015 2:09:00 AM
wow that is amazing XD
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Date: 1/22/2014 7:39:00 AM
Intriguing piece, and an impressive one too. Some great word usage and description.
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Date: 11/20/2013 5:15:00 PM
This poem is beautifully written and deeply expressed. An excellent poem, Linda! You are amazingly talented, my friend!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poems. I appreciate it very much!...I am looking forward to reading that new poem of ours. I can't wait to see where you take it this time! :)
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Date: 9/1/2013 8:00:00 PM
Well they have said it all dear Linda. This is a superb piece. Mustapha
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Date: 7/7/2013 11:18:00 AM
I give you the highest rating possible my friend. A great poem with a great deal of character. Peace. Roger Dale Hadden.
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Date: 6/25/2013 11:28:00 AM
I simply love this poem... what a beauty... I keep saying this about your work Linda.. so powerful and conjuring such imagery... but this poem is something else... as we say in Malta... Prosit!!! p.s. sorry for the delay... I was out of action for a while :) good to be back.
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Date: 4/5/2013 8:43:00 AM
You never disappoint, PD. Another gem. I hope you and Royal are getting on a little better...I know words don't do justice to the pain, but I have thought much about ya'll lately. Well, I hope your weekend is pleasant. I will not be back til' monday. My brother and I are going to the ozark mountains to turkey hunt. See ya...Caleb
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Date: 3/14/2013 6:54:00 PM
Nice write and I wrote smoke on the water for you after I read your last two poems. and your welcome for the rainbow colors.
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Date: 12/16/2012 7:42:00 AM
Wishing you and your family a very blessed and wonderful Christmas! God bless you all in the coming year! Take care! JP
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Date: 12/3/2012 8:28:00 AM
Excellent re-write. You have a great gift with words. I see from a comment below this actually didn't place, but if I was the judge I would've placed it higher on the list. Honest! -- Sean
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Date: 12/2/2012 5:19:00 PM
An excellent rewrite PD. I am really impressed by your poetic talent. It is a gift of God. Thanks PD for heart warming comment on my Haiku Roses. As they say 'beauty is in the eyes of beholder'. I praise your eyes. Love. -Mohammad
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Date: 11/30/2012 4:13:00 PM
A very fine re write indeed PD, i think you captured the gist of what Catie was reaching for quite well. Nicely done, blessings Carl
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Date: 10/23/2012 2:29:00 PM
PD, you outdid yourself on the Dead Winter poem. Good job.
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Date: 10/20/2012 2:43:00 PM
' I'm coming from the Member Contest Winners page. I came across catie's winners. A shocker not to see you name among her winners. I read all her winners, this poem is still the best one. better luck next time' Sandy
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Date: 10/20/2012 2:43:00 PM
perfect is all I see
Date: 10/20/2012 5:07:00 AM
Hey PD,...this was one of Catie's most epic writes ever and I am so thrilled u creatively tinkered with it! Awesome work...this was one of my all time favs of hers, just like your camp fire write....here's to another great weekend! luv, gwendolen
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Date: 10/19/2012 4:18:00 PM
HI LINDA I DID LEAVE YOU SOME SOUP UNSURE WEAHTER YOU GOT BACKL ON SOUP 23 HOPE YOU ARE OK STATE OF CONFUSION POEM WELL NOT AS GOOD AS ORIGINAL I STILL DEAL WITH ISSUES BUT THIS ST AT MOENT BOARDER LINE BE WELL SEE YOU ON HERE NEXT WEEK XX DAVIDSCOTT
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Date: 10/19/2012 1:15:00 PM
I think you shine in this one. rEally great execution and I like the style its crafted in. It only comes from a womens touch.
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Date: 10/14/2012 10:10:00 PM
Wowsers! Marvelous pieces! Yours was touching and so vivid in my mind. I very much enjoy reading your work. Thank you for stopping by here and there! And thanks for posting and sharing with us such great pieces! Always, Laura
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Date: 10/14/2012 12:54:00 PM
Dropping by to say hello my dear sweet poet friend. Hope your well and enjoying life. Hugs n kiss on the cheek. Michael
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Date: 10/13/2012 2:05:00 PM
A winter of the souls and senses, presents itself to me in these writes Catie and P D.." quite deep with much to take in.." well done the pair of you..)
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Date: 10/12/2012 10:03:00 AM
Wow!! What a coming together of the minds of two brilliant ladies. Hats off to you both for a great and deep expression of words. One love. Joy Wells
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Date: 10/11/2012 3:27:00 AM
Amazing poems by both of you!Enjoyed very much.
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Date: 10/10/2012 3:21:00 PM
PD, I had no time last night to read this one, but wow, I love both poems. they are really beautiful and I see why you chose this one of CAtie's. It is a very special poem with a mood that invokes a very nostalgic and sad feeling. You captured the essence of this eloquent poem.
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Date: 10/10/2012 2:22:00 PM
COULD NOT POST THIS COMMENT EARLIER DUE TO SITE ISSUES LUV .. BRILLIANT AND MAGNIFICENT REWRITE FROM cATIE'S POEM .. I DON'T MUCH LIKE TO TOUCH ANOTHER'S WORK BUT THIS IS STUPENDOUS .. WINNING WISHES MY BFF PD FROM YOUR BFF FOR LIFE .. SWEET
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Date: 10/10/2012 2:12:00 PM
Stopping by your poetry list today to tell you thank you for your kind comments on my writing. Your comment was truly appreciated P.D.... Love, Carol
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