Stardust

Like smoke from Grandpa's old cigars,
I watch a swell of gleaming stars
drift in waves of brilliant dust
like crumbs from smoldering crust.
I wonder where they might lead,
which starving soul they might feed.
Like smoke from Grandpa's old cigars,
I watch a swell of gleaming stars.


Written: 7/5/2013
For Nette's "Stardust in an Octelle" contest 
By Heather Ober
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 7/18/2013 10:21:00 PM
Heather, I love your star dust winning poem. Congratulations! Luv* SKAT
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Date: 7/17/2013 4:21:00 PM
You are very tslented and creative dear Jeather..lovely
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Date: 7/17/2013 3:17:00 PM
Love this one my dear Heather! Particularly love the "smoke from Grandpa's old cigars!" Hugs, Jack xoxox
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Date: 7/17/2013 1:23:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 7/16/2013 4:01:00 AM
smokin' and well written, heather.. congrats on your placement in my contest.. do check my blog..:) hugggs!.:)
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Date: 7/15/2013 9:14:00 PM
This made me think of my grandpa and his pipe, I loved the smell of his tobacco. Thanks for this memory. Congratulations.
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Date: 7/15/2013 7:10:00 PM
Heatherlovely poem congrats shadow x smiles
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Date: 7/11/2013 5:15:00 PM
Reads likw winning material to me..Enjoyed reading it today..Good luck in Nette's contest...Sara
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Date: 7/10/2013 4:00:00 PM
Whew!...What can I say? You've done it again here my friend...The way you blend your grandpa's cigars with the rest is brilliant and then the crumbs and starving souls?...Whew!
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Date: 7/9/2013 7:10:00 PM
Heather....pulled dreamily into this mesmerizing poem! Good Work! jimbo
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Date: 7/8/2013 2:27:00 PM
What spectacular word flow! "Dust like crumbs from smoldering crust" <--- THIS line! Damn.
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Date: 7/8/2013 10:41:00 AM
beautiful memory...nicely done
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Date: 7/8/2013 8:54:00 AM
The stars were awesome last night, but I could not come close to this if I attempted to describe them. I consider this the perfect little stardust poem, regretting that any words I may say on the subject would not do it justice. ~ I was so pleased / thrilled / overjoyed to read your last comment on my poem. I am forever grateful that you take time to beautifully express what you think of my poems, and wish that I could respond more eloquently.
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Date: 7/6/2013 7:25:00 AM
soup mail!..:)
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Date: 7/5/2013 10:13:00 PM
OMG, this SHOULD be used in the contest. Go ahead and enter it. I am sure half the people here will not do it right. they will either not personify or they will get the form wrong. Please enter it. This is outstanding. this form seemis very similar to triolet. I will have to give it a go !!
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Date: 7/5/2013 12:13:00 PM
Music to my ears...So beautiful, sweetie. Just like you. You have so much beauty in that soul of yours. I'm so proud of you. Too bad it can't be entered in the contest.... :( Love it anyway. Hugs!
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