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refreshing spring breeze carries perfume through the air swallow’s playful flight

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 1/10/2013 3:42:00 PM
I like this...just as it is !! I see it and smell it !! Lovely haiku !!
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Date: 1/9/2013 11:06:00 AM
You are getting the idea! 2 lines connected gramatically & conceptually & a surprise perseption in line 3! now remember you need not do 5/7/5 [certainly you can but...] [a perfumed breeze/brushes my cheek--swallows pass] //saying perfumed SHOWS you spring without telling us it is spring ;) just rying to show you..simplify.. keep in mind //Jack Kerouac advise a real haiku's gotta be as simple as porridge. Light & Love
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