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the hour late, I hesitate
to lift the shield of isolation
the walls lean in, as if to hear
they make believe, by breathing hard,
as if they sleep,  
but I am wise to them, I am...

I know the sound, I know of eyes...
these walls have souls that live within
the air is solid, the light is dim
beyond my window, summer stirs
a sleuth that leers... , absurd it seems,
but watching me, I feel the burn

it shuffles in, with shades of black
a muffled step, through restless leaves
I catch my breath, ......yet strange, ....at ease 
the curtain pants, with pulsing veins
I brush my hair, step out of clothes...
wait one moment to compose...
slip on a gown, 
holding close my other self
the one who never dares to take a chance
I want to dance the seven veils,
for eyes that dwell beyond the glass
beyond my dream,  ....they look at me

two eyes,they watch in black and white,
I feel the burning of the night
the suddenness of who I am...
she has no name
she has no shame 
wanton, willing in the dark
it's sliding in the crisp black grass
I douse the light.........and step up close
to look again, through window's pane
no questions asked

the eyes aren't there.....
in black and white.......and by the gate...
nothing waits....

becoming clear
but I don't care......
in isolation............the walls are falling
and have old souls

I know they stare
I'll dance for them
I know for certain
they are there
 


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  1. Date: 4/17/2014 7:13:00 AM
    this is superb, carrie, and totally deserving of 1st place...very well written and atmospheric, with some wonderful lines such as "summer stirs/a sleuth that leers" and "the curtain pants"...you're just a born poet, a natural, you have that special something that can't be taught; what more is there to say? except...congrats! :)

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 7:49:00 PM
    Unclear? and isn't that how a damned one would feel? unclear/conflicted! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 5:59:00 AM
    Congrats on THIS first prize winning poem. I am NOT a fan of Dracula (and a look a likes and their stories) but from the first line the cold shivers appeared on my arm so you've come my way (and didnt chase me away!)with this awesome 'free verse. Dutch admiration, congrats and greetings Elly free verse.

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:59:00 AM
    wow well worth first place Carrie dark and eerie xx

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 6:21:00 PM
    You ROCK, Carrie. Congrats on a well deserved win.

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 5:06:00 PM
    Delightful, just keep dancin. Congrats on your win

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 7:50:00 AM
    Feeling like Bram Stoker is alive. Congrats on the win, carrie

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 7:06:00 AM
    Awesome poem Carrie, some of the verses you have penned are outstanding, great props to set the scene for an immortal romp against the black crisp grass, my friend you know how to write dark, as well as you write light, a chiascuro poetess, that you are, congratulations luv xxx

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 6:07:00 AM
    This write drew me in from the title, like Dracula's hynotic stare...Cheers for your glory!

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 1:58:00 AM
    This is quite original ... and the atmosphere so perfectly created. Works for me :) congrats on a worthy win. // paul

  1. Date: 4/14/2014 11:45:00 PM
    Congratulations on this awesome poem well deserving of top spot. Jan x

  1. Date: 4/14/2014 10:13:00 PM
    Nice Carrie... Congratulations on your first place win in the contest... Verlena

  1. Date: 2/14/2014 7:56:00 PM
    Impressive poetry.

  1. Date: 9/5/2012 2:07:00 AM
    Hard to understand, only after reading the last verse. great poem, great pontetial. I wonder how you pulled this one out. I am impressed!!! S.T

  1. Date: 9/4/2012 1:10:00 PM
    It's an interesting poem, enjoyed. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 9/2/2012 12:09:00 PM
    well written Carrie, Cindy aka Lucinda ~ take care and God bless ya!

  1. Date: 8/30/2012 11:53:00 PM
    Very good work!

  1. Date: 8/28/2012 9:17:00 PM
    wow, this is so surreal. Not sure I got it, but I sure enjoyed the read. It was a ghost story? I think John is gonna LOVE this.

  1. Date: 8/22/2012 7:24:00 PM
    It unfold nicely until the very end, enjoyed your poetry tonight Carrie, always a treat, vie