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Smoke Rings

Smoke Rings If she wanted to stay he would make her a place, for he loves ev'rything that she is, and he'd willingly give all the world and the stars for her love--if they only were his. But he likes it alone, and in silence he knows, if he wants, he can talk to the moon, or hear voices at bars, or the children he loves, and if wanting to go--he'll go soon. Or to stay if he choose, for the night is still young, but she's there, and he's wanting to say all the words in his heart--but he's holding them back and the night is much colder than day. So he goes to someone who's no danger to ways though he smiles, he is really not there and he wants to forget, but he wants to live on, if she stays or she goes, he will care. And the one he is with, sees the love in his eyes, and she knows it's not hers anyway, but the ones' who was late, and the one who will go, and the one he will never let stay. If he asks and she stays, he'll go off the deep end, and he knows she loves silence--as he; and she stays for a while, til the silence is deep, and the end is the end that must be. But she looks at the floor when he wants her to see, and she goes when he wants her to stay, but the words are not there, and he watches her go, with the thought that it must be this way, but he smiles in his heart--for he's known her at least, and he's loved--and has found love is good, and the end that he feared, he prevented in life, though he wonders if he ever should. And the journey is long--he'll look back on her face, and he'll think, many times, there it goes! and he'll always regret; for it's always alive, and she's part of his life, and he knows. And the others who see--feel the same for their own, and they wonder why he doesn't try, but it's smoke rings they see; or a bird in their hand that is wanting to fade in the sky. And the sky will embrace ev'rything in the end, and the things that we see are a mask, and the smoke rings that fade to the will of the sky are in love--and the sky didn't ask.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/29/2022 12:27:00 PM
I love this! The meter is solid and the story flows so well, I got wrapped up in it. Good job!
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Date: 5/13/2014 9:21:00 AM
Beautiful - Well done!
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Date: 4/4/2011 5:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Veebdosa for the contest "The one that got away" sponsored by Thvia. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:49:00 PM
So very charming and I really like your meter some how for me it was either too long OR two poems? From "But she looks down could be a separate poem" [without the but of course ;)] the ending for part 2 is particulary spectacular! Congrad's on this win! Light & Love
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Date: 4/2/2011 7:45:00 AM
This is stunning and so well done....congratulations on your win, Veebdosa!
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Date: 4/2/2011 5:26:00 AM
"And they wonder why he doesn't try but in Smokerings they see"..Congratulations on your first place win.....Judy
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Date: 4/2/2011 5:02:00 AM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Thvia, veebdosa
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Date: 4/2/2011 2:19:00 AM
Simply brilliant! This contest brought out such incredible talent.Many congrats on your BIG WIN, veebosa. Lainie
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Date: 4/2/2011 12:02:00 AM
Wonderful lyric poem here, worthy winner in this contest, congrats. Harry
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Date: 4/1/2011 10:27:00 PM
Really truly great poetry. It is like a song. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/1/2011 8:51:00 PM
Very nice use of simple rhymes and the cadence is immaculate. I had to read it over again and then out loud. Just a beautiful piece... thank you for entering it in my contest... just wow.
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Date: 4/1/2011 8:48:00 PM
Congrats Vee on your first place win in Thvia's contest .. an awesome entry luv.. so happy to be sharing first place with u as well ..enjoy with luv..
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Date: 4/1/2011 8:46:00 PM
deep and fantastic, vee... congrats on being on to[ of the heap! :) huggs,nette
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Date: 3/31/2011 7:38:00 AM
Very nice, good luck in the contest
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