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Sleepless

sandman missed his house
the night he was most needed
consumed by such grief
his wife, a cancer victim,
had lost her battle that morn



*For Susan Burch’s “Tanka” contest
Written March 19, 2012

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Kim Merryman

Date: 4/4/2012 1:57:00 PM

This is just too, too sad. Congrats on your win, Carolyn! Love, Kim

Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/2/2012 3:51:00 PM

ps...hope fishing is going well..if you peak in, please read my fishing poem..Love, Gwendolen

Gwendolen Song
Date: 4/2/2012 3:51:00 PM

peek

Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/2/2012 3:50:00 PM

Great form, Carolyn...So much grief in this tanka..I bet the sandman knew his sprinkling would have been ineffective...I love this tanka and I am pleased to see you at the top of the list...You should just make a permanent place for yourself up there ya know...ha ha..Always love reading your work...:)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/2/2012 3:41:00 PM

Beyond touching! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/2/2012 2:10:00 PM

Tender words Carolyn. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/2/2012 10:08:00 AM

congrats Carolyn on a brilliant win for this sensitive entry luv.. a good friend of mine recently succumbed to Alzheimers this week ..another from cancer.. we pray for all.. who are suffering a loss..

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/2/2012 9:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Deborah Burch

Date: 4/2/2012 9:02:00 AM

Wonderfully done Carolyn...such gentle and creative handling ...I love this...Congratulations on your win my friend...well done big huggsss,love deb

Chuck Novotny

Date: 4/2/2012 12:30:00 AM

What a difficult topic to capture. It seemed almost dispassionate at first, but that comes up with the tenderness in the words you've chosen. - Chuck

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/26/2012 10:25:00 PM

A sad write Carolyn, it is amazing how when we really need to sleep we are unable too.. A clever Tanka.. All the best for the contest.. I did make a turn at the doc on Monday, will be back to my silly self soon ;) love Wilma

Jack Horne

Date: 3/25/2012 3:23:00 PM

love this clever but sad piece, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/25/2012 2:18:00 AM

Oh shucks! That's so sad but this is really very creative, Carolyn! I like how you approached death here... Wish you the best in Susan's contest! hugs :)

Kash Poet

Date: 3/24/2012 1:32:00 PM

Very touching Tanka by you Carolyn.Best wishes for the contest.Pl.visit my poem"Give me all your pain" if possible.

Daver Austin

Date: 3/24/2012 10:45:00 AM

A Tanka with depth and feeling. I love the Tanka, and this is a very good one. I'm way behind getting to the soup. Seems like things just get stacked up once in a while. Love, daver

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/20/2012 11:56:00 AM

Sad write, Carolyn. The nights are the worst when grieving. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Rhonda

John Freeman

Date: 3/20/2012 7:44:00 AM

Nice to read your poetry my friend, always sympathy for the hurt in others, Carolyn. Love can heal the wounds even now. Agape, Moses

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 3/20/2012 3:54:00 AM

This one leaves me sad, but enjoyed the write, jag

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/20/2012 12:46:00 AM

What a sad write here Carolyn! I hate to see poems of death. It frightens me Carolyn! But it is part of life and we must all deal with that! We all must die sometime! Oh, and a little bird told me that you have many more years to live my friend, it must be true, a little bird told me! I just loved your poem immensely! I really enjoyed your write that I have read this evening! Great Work!!

John Rhinem

Date: 3/19/2012 12:53:00 PM

Smile ˜ "Splattered" * This Would Be My Sincere Take Upon It All ˜ Moving, My Dear Precious Carolyn ˜ Love Always, John!:) *