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Seeking Evening's Peace

As evening slips its frail chemise Old woman dwells on passing sprees To track hazed lifetime’s reveries; Entrusting stars for pain’s release. Rhyme Battle: Round 2 Contest

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Bl Devnath

Date: 12/15/2013 10:44:00 AM

It's a nice dreamlike poem. Contrasting beauty hidden in it. Congrats very lately, sorry my lovely friend. am was busy. Loved always, bl

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/11/2013 10:07:00 AM

Nette .. Congratulations in "'Rhyme Battle: Round 2 contest''...have a nice one... LUV *LINDA

Juliet Ligon

Date: 12/7/2013 8:36:00 PM

Very elegant, Nette. Congrats!

Poet. Undertaker

Date: 11/21/2013 4:08:00 AM

nette, your rain contest really made every one nostalgic and was really a pain killer. (: ) Jenish.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/18/2013 1:13:00 PM

Magnificent says it all

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/18/2013 10:39:00 AM

Ahh!! Like the metaphoric language in this one..Enjoyed reading ..Sara

Jerry Bolton

Date: 11/18/2013 7:54:00 AM

Oh, I do like this poem, nette. It is spread across the darkened sky and written with such precise penmanship that the sky is alight with it beauty. Yes.

Donna Jones

Date: 11/18/2013 7:34:00 AM

Hi nette....oh my..how close to home this one hit...loved it...

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/18/2013 6:53:00 AM

You so love the night don't you my friend, it is evident again within this write! My favorite line has to be, "Entrusting stars for pains release" this is so true, many people put all their worries upon the stars, so they can be3 relieved of all the pain! This is another masterpiece my friend, such a grand write! I really loved reading this fabulous poem this morning! What a dynamite piece, Great Work!!

Mark Peterson

Date: 11/18/2013 12:21:00 AM

Gosh, Nette, you've managed to say so much with so few words. I experience the profound most deeply when immersed in viewing stars.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/17/2013 6:28:00 PM

Got to love those chemises! Light & Love

Ken Carroll

Date: 11/17/2013 4:06:00 PM

Hi Nette, An awesome and serene write! Ken

Arden Gopela

Date: 11/17/2013 3:50:00 PM

So emotional... looking on the stars in a quite-majestic night brings you calmness in many ways we can't even explain. Sometimes, that's where we find the exact peace in our hearts. This one's beutiful. Take care, Nette! Love,love,love! :-) - Den

Cherl Dunn

Date: 11/17/2013 3:40:00 PM

This is very different but it has alot of feeling in the lines thank you for sharing. alos thank you for your comments.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/17/2013 1:24:00 PM

- Happiness is not to be 100 years - happiness is living now - Wistful written with beautiful thoughts. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Amelie Mara

Date: 11/17/2013 1:12:00 PM

A stream of beautifully penned thoughts on life and mortality. Lovely flow until I hit the penultimate line "entrusting stars for pain's release*.. Unexpectedly a knock- out, Nette.

Kennedy Muitherero

Date: 11/17/2013 1:00:00 PM

Wonderful!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/17/2013 12:19:00 PM

Brilliant like the stars she gazes upon.

Leon Datu

Date: 11/17/2013 12:05:00 PM

Live emotions are felt throughout the lines of "Seeking Evening's Peace".An exquisite poem with rare poetic voice.Memories are both sad and benign; this is a poem for all seasons. I await my muse for another encounter with you, Nette.