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Revelation in the Rain

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Revelation in the Rain

She briskly walks in January’s rain, which drums the endless rhythm of her pain, pulling closer round her shoulder in the downpour the leather jacket he so often wore. Another day like this she can remember when he had worn the jacket, and against her he’d pressed as they stood kissing in the rainfall. The world could wash away; he was her all! No storm could stop their loving as they raced with great anticipation to his place. Before they’d even reached the bedroom door, they’d flung their rain-soaked clothes along the floor. Underneath the sheets, though cold and wet, they madly kissed. He was as passionate as winter’s storm away from which they’d run, and yet he warmed her like sweet summer’s sun! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ She‘s almost home; the rain has nearly died. She thinks of all the nights she lay and cried. While thinking how the rainstorm’s cold still lingers, inside the jacket’s pockets she moves her fingers. In the lining of one pocket, her fingers meet a crumpled piece of paper - an old receipt - its date from when, without a word, he’d left their town and in the city, by a drunk had got run down. The piece of paper gives her now a revelation- A high class jewelry store had been his destination. He’d planned to ask her very soon to be his wife. and bought a ring there on that last day of his life! His parents gave his jacket to her, yet she’d always guessed the worst for why he’d left. What happened to the ring? She cannot know. But now her tears with bitter sweetness flow.

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  1. Date: 8/29/2013 8:57:00 PM
    As a reader, you really feel what she feels. Wonderful shift at the line and then twist at the end. Very well written and poetic story.

  1. Date: 7/9/2013 5:35:00 PM
    Love this poem. I love being able to feel what I'm reading and I did. You wrote it well with beautiful depth and expression <3

  1. Date: 7/4/2013 12:11:00 AM
    "tremendously awesome........... congrats!!! SKAT"

  1. Date: 6/29/2013 5:43:00 AM
    I love it. Sad and tragic, yet with a bittersweet ending bringing comfort to the hurting girl. This one is most definitely a winner. Congrats.

  1. Date: 6/28/2013 3:27:00 PM
    Andrea congratulations on your suburb poem. A well deserved win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 6/26/2013 2:11:00 PM
    Unrequited love! ahhh the pain! Good one Andie. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 6/26/2013 11:02:00 AM
    Wow this is a beautiful tale full of sadness. It is going into one of my fav.love phyl You made me feel with this poem--what a gem.

  1. Date: 6/25/2013 6:08:00 PM
    I thought I had left a comment on this one but I see it, I remember reading it. Congratulations, this is a very deserving winner and a beautiful write it is. Take care, Richard

  1. Date: 6/17/2013 8:50:00 PM
    Beautiful, exciting and sad so many emotions felt in a beautiful love story. The twist at the end pulls the heartstrings :)

  1. Date: 6/9/2013 9:35:00 AM
    Strong write on the feeling side, with effective similes woven into its story.. pleased to have stopped by here Andrea:)

  1. Date: 6/8/2013 9:42:00 AM
    First Wagner, The Ring of the Gods - then Tolkien, Fellowship of the Ring - then Andrea with her enticing mystery. Love, daver

  1. Date: 6/7/2013 12:03:00 PM
    Aww shucks, what a fulfilling revelation that is! I really enjoyed how you wrote this in 2 parts, with a promising love story in the 1st part then giving that twist in the 2nd part-- Reading this was like watching a movie-- I am such a sucker for happy endings and for me, you ended this so beautifully-nothing could compare to the closure when one can get... I think you did a great job here, Andrea & I see this was for a challenge on leather jackets or something? Heartwarming story indeed! hugs

  1. Date: 6/7/2013 8:05:00 AM
    You are a fantastic storyteller!!! This bittersweet tale flows so well with such smooth rhymes. I have to fave it.

  1. Date: 6/7/2013 6:45:00 AM
    So we have to write a poem on leather jackets too:))) a captivating story by you here Andrea.Best wishes.

  1. Date: 6/6/2013 3:19:00 PM
    the emotion of sadness runs deep with this awesome write....well crafted....best wishes in the contest

  1. Date: 6/6/2013 6:54:00 AM
    beautiful arrangement behind the story of ur couplet! love it!

  1. Date: 6/5/2013 10:59:00 PM
    Oh no dis is too touching, a remarkable narrative! Is it fictional? Whatever it is its impressive n captivating even if d soulful content leaves us sad.

  1. Date: 6/5/2013 5:01:00 PM
    The dream inside her heart lives on to only find that he is gone. The cold rain soaks her to the bone. Reminding her she's all alone. A fateful turn in a short life. Left her to become someone else's wife. A leather jacket, bought and sold. Tells the tale that had to be told.

  1. Date: 6/5/2013 2:45:00 PM
    you have this nailed it has everything a great poem should have excellent pen Shadow x

  1. Date: 6/5/2013 1:00:00 PM
    what an imagination running across the board... very creative use of words to express riddled feelings in a rhymimg scheme that floats... well done, andie... where's kash?..:) huggs

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