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Random thoughts 52 The Ottava Rima

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Random thoughts 52 The Ottava Rima

Ottava Rima
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lines of 10 or 11 syllables

For the longest time you were just a dream,
A fantasy cast while deep in REM sleep.
I watch as you rest, my new found beauty.
The perfect match, so much more than a creep.
Lone wolf on the prowl till you stepped on the scene,
it's been so long since being swept off my feet.
I cannot tell you that I've fallen in love,
But girl we fit like an Isotoner glove.

So incomplete before you stepped in my life,
no longer the lone wolf, I have found my mate.
Tossing and turning alone late at night,
not sprung yet boo, but I know this is fate.
I'll compromise, to this love I'll comply.
My heart belongs to you, there is no debate.
Only time will tell if we are meant to be,
I am devoted to you with honesty..

I am not that man you have had in the past
I am true to you boo, a faithful man.
The affections I give will forever last.
Our new love has blossomed and I feel grand,
let it develop and not move to fast.
Through tribulation we can both withstand.
Take my hand boo so we can live as one 
because I need you, like the earth needs the sun....

Dedicated to Kim....
The one with whom has taken my heart.....

Jared Pickett

Copyright © Jared Pickett

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  1. Date: 3/31/2011 7:06:00 AM
    Well Kim is a lucky lady!! Glad for your happiness!!

  1. Date: 3/22/2011 10:40:00 AM
    so that's why you had been gone for a while, jarred.. when love calls, all else is undone... pure romantic delight! :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 2/19/2011 4:55:00 PM
    OK OK it's wonderful to be in LUV but have u forgotten us who LUV u on the Soup? miss u much Lone Wolf ... glad all is going well in the romance department as I cannot think of another thing that would keep u far from us here ..."Sweetheart"...

  1. Date: 2/2/2011 8:51:00 AM
    Hey Dude..I never did see the listing of the winners of your contest...Hit me up!...Jimmy

  1. Date: 1/9/2011 6:33:00 PM
    Hey Mr. J. thankxx for my HM in your contest for "New Love Nuance" ...but where are your winners and contest list showing? to congratulate all your winners? u usually do a blog but have not seen any yet... Ron and I are away this weekend for some alone time and noticed my special honor and wanted to thank u my friend... let me know what's going on with the list? luv to ya..."Sweetheart"...

  1. Date: 1/5/2011 7:36:00 AM
    Just a really beautiful love poem, Jared, to "boo" it flows magically and is full of your love for her~~

  1. Date: 1/4/2011 6:28:00 AM
    This is a beautiful example, Jared glad i looked in before an attempt at your contest. awesome poem. Happy New Year to both Kim and yourself. Harry

  1. Date: 1/1/2011 3:26:00 PM
    Jared I wrote for you of love but love of beauty art God...right now in my life that is wearmy passion and my love resides hopefully thesethings can also bring tears to your eyes..if not..please let me know and I will try again? Light & Love [hot pants]

  1. Date: 12/29/2010 7:08:00 AM
    A romantic write if ever I have seen one.. Beautiful Jared! Hope the year ahead will be an awesome one for you and those close to you ;-)

  1. Date: 12/22/2010 7:51:00 PM
    Hey ... Mr. J... I know u are in luv and all that jazz right now.. but have a happy holiday my friend and remember who luved ya first..hahaha.. see the mistletoe luv... use your imagination..ho ho ho... enjoy with luv..

  1. Date: 12/16/2010 5:06:00 PM
    young love in the 21st century [fourth line from bottom "too"] we've been missing your input! Hope your season is extra Merry! Light & Love

  1. Date: 12/16/2010 5:00:00 PM
    Such a romantic write for the one that you love..I am sure she will be delighted at your work..Sara

  1. Date: 12/10/2010 11:22:00 AM
    Kim's a lucky gal to have a man who wait until he's sure to profess his eternal devotion. This is a great example for those of who have been struggling with the ottava rima form, Jared. Hope you and Kim share magical moments this holiday season! Peace and blessings, Carolyn

  1. Date: 12/10/2010 8:59:00 AM
    Well congrats on the new romance Jared and kudos to Kim who has given u the spark to create this wonderful write my friend.. a perfect entry if u could enter your own contest... so far the ones I have read have done their best to satisfy your challenge.. my own luv is both new..old..and new once as the "Sweetheart"'s all good luv.. happy weekend..and do everything .. that I would do.. and more..haha..