Raft

Pisces vacation... muscles melting in the sun waves cradle gently bodiless, only the now Mother Ocean rocks her child

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Skat A

Date: 6/2/2015 12:09:00 AM

Tim, congratulations on your awesome summer time win. ~SKAT~

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 11/10/2014 6:36:00 AM

This first line catches the reader in a way that few poems manage, well done.Great tanka. Congrats on another fine placing with this piece.

Mohan Chutani

Date: 11/10/2014 6:23:00 AM

only the now, nice tanka. congrats

Jan Allison

Date: 11/9/2014 4:19:00 PM

such serene and peaceful imagery - many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/30/2012 11:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning poem in "Sunshine" contest. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/29/2012 8:38:00 PM

TIM..:-), CONGRATULATIONS :-) with your awesome poem in Leonora's "Tanka Crazy - Sunshine" contest. Have yourself a sweet night * Luv~PD

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2012 3:13:00 PM

Loved the "feeling" this one gave from the first time I saw it and also today. Congrats on your win.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/29/2012 12:00:00 PM

CONGRATS TIM ON AN EXCELLEN T WRITE AND WIN LUV ON SUNSHINE ..

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 10/29/2012 10:09:00 AM

Big congratulations on your win Tim xx

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/29/2012 5:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Leonora's "Tanka Crazy-Sunshine" contest Tim. Love, Carol

Len Gasun

Date: 10/29/2012 5:47:00 AM

Congratulations Tim for winning 3rd Place in my contest “Crazy Sunshine”. You filled me up with so much happiness while reading your splendid poem. Thank you so much for your full support . May the sun shines in your life always. Love/hug, Leonora

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2012 6:57:00 AM

Very original, Tim. Me likes!

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 10/15/2012 7:10:00 PM

Creative and original! Nice imagery here! Enjoyed it! :)

Joy Wellington

Date: 10/12/2012 10:07:00 AM

A smile to my face on this one Tim. Imagery unlimited...fills the mind. One love. Joy Wells

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/12/2012 9:41:00 AM

so relaxing! i love the "muscles melting!"

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 10/12/2012 9:37:00 AM

A timeless moment captured...I liked this.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/12/2012 9:05:00 AM

awesome rendition, Tim, leaves one indeed with a sense of isolation...

Stephen Parker

Date: 10/12/2012 8:27:00 AM

Unlike Kathryn, I will eat any fish that doesn't eat me first. A lovely lullaby on the ocean wide. Enjoyed your tuna tanka!

Kathryn Collins

Date: 10/12/2012 8:06:00 AM

Hey Tiim - My birthday is in March. I don't eat fish but love Mother Ocean rocking her child. Beautiful image. Thanks for your insightful comment on Jeanne Marie. Jeannie was my daughter and died in 95 at the age of 21. It was a snowmobile accident in late morning on the brightest sunniest day you've ever seen. love, Kathy