Probing the Unconscious Space

If the unbearable lightness of being has pushed you to the brink of catastrophic meltdown,
walk to the edge of our flat two-dimensional existence 
and take a leap of faith...

You may drift through space for quite some time
eyeing the stars, the planets, the galaxies
that make up the great and boring universe beyond.

Eventually you'll come across darker, scarier territory,
unseen with the naked eye
yet comprising 95% of all matter,
and all that matters,
otherwise known as the unconscious.

Some day you'll feel safer in the void, 
more secure,
at peace.

With not one mirror in sight to reflect your self concept,
everything and nothing make perfect sense here,
for they are one and the same.

You are the only observer
of man's true final frontier
and his one and only mystery.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 12/3/2009 12:18:00 PM
Many congrats on your piece being featured this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 12/2/2009 12:30:00 PM
excellent job at self analysis ;P Light & Love Oh Contemplative One
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Date: 12/1/2009 5:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your excellent poem being featured this week Yoni. May you have many more. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/30/2009 12:47:00 PM
Many congratulations on your poem being featured Yoni >> James
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Date: 11/30/2009 10:11:00 AM
Hi Yoni, congratulations on your feature this week. Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 11/30/2009 5:56:00 AM
Excellente write. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. A. W. www.freewebs.com/abcedit
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Date: 7/25/2009 8:42:00 AM
BRILLIANT! Yoni, there are many times when we are caught up in circumstances that seem to be leading to a "catastrophic meltdown." But, as you relate so well in this excellent write, we need only "take a leap of faith" to find there are more important things than the petty frailties and misgivings that contribute to our self concept and cause us to be self centered! Amazing Poem -- one for my faves! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/24/2009 12:55:00 PM
Yoni this is deep,you feel safer in the void,yes in the void sometimes i feel safer then surrounded in places where im not me ,in my void i can be me and i love to drift in the great boring universe,for me the universe is great yet never boring,and im not afraid to pass the scarier territories if i know they lead me to my true self of unconscious--Yoni this is going to my favs cos it is a gem,you are bright my friend--charma
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Date: 7/24/2009 11:25:00 AM
Yoni, you work here is very deep into the soul of most of our lives. I will have to read this one again and again. You were right about my poem about Fear...Sara
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Date: 7/23/2009 4:02:00 PM
you have soup mail
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Date: 7/23/2009 2:49:00 PM
Very interesting. Yoni. I like it. Your use of outerspace in the this poem, is does relate ideas about the importance of man to himself and to the universe. Although I have a very NON-BORING concept of our universe, (Follow this like to see Genesis Decoded. http://www.redbubble.com/people/daneann/writing/3355478-genesis-decoded )The way you used OS with reference to 2-D space, jumping off, passing celestial bodies as you go to the void, worked quite well in this poem. It's good. Love,Dane mail
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Date: 7/23/2009 2:07:00 PM
check soup mail Yoni
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Date: 7/23/2009 9:04:00 AM
Yup yup we are both correct..thanks! I love learning!
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Date: 7/23/2009 7:20:00 AM
when you have the courage to take the leap and float, your life will begin.
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Date: 7/23/2009 7:18:00 AM
this got me. Right in my favorites. You are describing my journey.
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Date: 7/23/2009 7:06:00 AM
fine Deb have it your way, though I swear dictionary.com gave me both spellings;}
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:55:00 AM
"the world's a better place today, no?" Yoni asks...refer to Harmless and Normal (above..dear one.."eyeing"...a unique observation above & I have found the dark to be a safe place often yet I feel the unconscious is the truer reality.) Light & Love
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:40:00 AM
Hi Yoni ... great write, I am in agreement with you. Thank you for your comment, you make a very good point about making assumptions, perhaps I do. It is refreshing to hear from a thoughtful mind.... I will read more of your work when Ican find the time
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:39:00 AM
A thought provoking piece....deep and somber, to make one look inside one's own self.
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Date: 7/23/2009 5:29:00 AM
Wow Yoni. Very thought provoking writing. Splendid !!! Love, Carol
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