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being number one wiggles underneath the rock a spade descends being number two hides behind the rock a foot falls being number three lays on top of the flat rock skin to stone being number four perches atop the rock shells crack being number six flies over the rock guano falls *who are the beings [do you see them in your head? I didn't tell you!] **how big is the rock [did you see it in your head? I didn't tell you.] *** how did what happen, happen? in line 3 did you see it in your head? **** haiku and senryu are in the moment verses which require showing not telling and the bulk of the poem is always in the readers mind not the poets pen.

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Date: 10/7/2013 10:59:00 PM
I just got the birds, Debs. The first three could be lots of different things for me. I really enjoyed these. Thanks for the winners list. I really enjoyed your contest. is the first one a snake or other wiggly animal?
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Date: 7/9/2013 2:46:00 PM
love these senyru, Debs - what's the main difference between haiku and senyru? Also, any tips on tanka, please? Congrats on your wins
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Date: 6/26/2013 2:25:00 PM
1 worm 2 mouse 3 reptile 4 bird dropping snail shells, no 6 seagull? dropping droppings..' L O L... but what happened to being no 5??? anyway have enjoyed the visit Debbie.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/26/2013 2:55:00 PM
1 toad LOL [they can too wiggle!] 2 cricket 3 ME 4 bird 5 Debbie can't count? 6 more bird seagull!
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Joe Maverick
Date: 6/26/2013 2:26:00 PM
Hey the captcha code on last reply box was dybs..'
Date: 6/22/2013 3:52:00 PM
I find this set of senryu to be stimulating! I am trying to figure out what creatures you are talking about - the first one is a worm, I believe Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/22/2013 3:58:00 PM
ahh for YOU Mat it can be a worm!! LOL maybe for me it was a snake! what matters is the vision YOU build in YOUR mind!
Date: 6/21/2013 2:55:00 PM
HI DEBBIE! Thanks for visiting my poem....I did take you advice. I changed it to a sonnet. :) I don't know why writing sonnets are so hard for me...At least this way it came naturally! With your help, of course! Thanks! I had to look up guano for this one! I'm learning from you! Such an interesting write this is....poor thing..Hugs!
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