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Playground of Pain

Sliding down the spoon into a bubbling puddle of heroin Creating the haze That creeps across the park Like a dense fog Swinging on C C H H A A I I N N S S OF METH - Like a pendulum on my grandfathers clock – Tick’ Tock Tick Tock (faster) Tick Tick Tick Tock………… Swinging on monkey bars of dealers With their MONKEY on my back Spinning on the merry go round of liquor Trying to walk life’s straight line Tick’ Tick Tick Tock (faster) Teeter tottering in and out of reality On the courts of life Playing for the last shot 3…...2…….......1………...... Tick Tock! ____________________________________________ written for the contest sponsored by Deborah Guzzi note: this is fictional a poem on substance abuse.

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Date: 9/14/2009 1:01:00 PM
Lordy knows what makes people enter the doorway of death by taking drugs. Excellent piece Abe>>James
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Date: 7/3/2009 8:56:00 PM
this is oh so awesome and creative! Great piece!
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Date: 5/29/2009 10:38:00 AM
Great work, Abe. You really have a way with words. Keep up the good work.
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Date: 5/18/2009 11:01:00 AM
I Love This.Abe,you truly are one heck of a poet.Can wait to see more of your work:)
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Date: 5/14/2009 3:39:00 PM
This is one of my favorites in the contest...well deserved win. Tick Tock! BG
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Date: 5/14/2009 10:45:00 AM
Dear Abe,Congratulations On YOUR well Deserved Win in Deborah's Contest Powerful Love the format I see Playgrounds differently now Superb Write ALWAYS...HG
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Date: 5/14/2009 10:23:00 AM
Drugs are wicked. Thanks for letting us know that this is fictional a poem on substance abuse. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/14/2009 6:04:00 AM
Congratulations on placing in the contest. A wonderful write... glad you added that it was fiction at the end. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 5/13/2009 11:50:00 PM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Abe Rgds Brian
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Date: 5/13/2009 6:50:00 PM
Congrats with your placement in the contest...Raul
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Date: 5/13/2009 4:41:00 PM
This was so amazing, and creative in a wicked sort of way!!! Great Job Abe!!! Congratulations on this winning poem!! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 5/13/2009 4:14:00 PM
Wow! So sorry I ever missed this amazing write! Warmest congrats Abe on your win in Debbie's contest! Well done! Love, Shar
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Date: 4/28/2009 8:37:00 PM
I love sliding down into a puddle of heroin! Lol! creative and interesting and thank you for commenting on my poem.
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Date: 4/22/2009 8:42:00 AM
A creative write that chisels beauty out of an ugly experience ... praise and prayers always, my friend.
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Date: 4/21/2009 12:07:00 PM
whoa nice visualzation Plus wait PLEASE DON"T READ:it soundz like my mom's life now <:,(
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Date: 4/21/2009 12:05:00 PM
man that deep ive alway feard a life on drugs it seems like the worst way to go looking arond the place i live it dosnt have many rewards and its our job to save those guys like super heros gangsta lopez and side kick skinnyjeans LETS DO IT
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Date: 4/21/2009 11:50:00 AM
cool
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Date: 4/21/2009 10:52:00 AM
amazing!!! I absolutely love this poem!!!
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Date: 4/21/2009 10:19:00 AM
I liked the chains of meth also, a sad poem but horrible reaity for the ones with these addictions.
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Date: 4/21/2009 6:00:00 AM
i liked it
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Date: 4/21/2009 5:19:00 AM
This is fictional but you wrote it so strongly..great imagery in this piece...you are a fine writer.
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Date: 4/21/2009 4:05:00 AM
Wonderfully chilling write and the way you've formatted makes it even better. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 4/20/2009 10:38:00 PM
Awesome write, I like the swing you created, clever...Raul
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Date: 4/20/2009 9:33:00 PM
Intense writing Abe! Great job! Thanks for visiting me :) Hugs. Izzy
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Date: 4/20/2009 8:59:00 PM
So creative, yet so eerie and dark.....yes...excellently wicked, and so sadly timely today. Well done, Abe. Good luck ....this is quite imaginative!
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