Patiently Awaiting

Upon the seas there sails a mighty ship
Her hold is weighted down with precious gold
She sails across the wide and surging sea

Alas! so dark and stormy is the sea
The men in fear and quaking grip the ship
The waves have no regard for chests of gold

While sailors try to lift the load of gold
The hull is damaged further by the sea
And rocks of distant shores have crushed the ship

Now lies the ship and gold beneath the sea


 

_ Form is both tritina and iambic pentameter _
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 8/23/2013 10:32:00 PM
Images of many things in this that sound like a movie ending with being lost at sea with all that gold... very creative :)
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Date: 3/16/2013 5:30:00 PM
Congratulations on a very fine win, Isaiah! Always a pleasure to read your writing. Annalise
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Date: 3/13/2013 10:22:00 AM
Congrad's on your win. So nice to read a new form. Light & Love
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Date: 3/10/2013 9:34:00 PM
ISAIAH, this happens to be a xool and exciting new form in which Andrea, introduced for her contest. ~ CONGRATULATIONS with your awesome Tritina winning poem. Take Care, LINDA
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Date: 3/10/2013 11:15:00 AM
awesome write friend Isaiah, so sad to know the fate of the ship :) Congratulations on your win. Cheers!!! Maria
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Date: 3/10/2013 7:32:00 AM
Isaiah congrats on your win, a stormy win this one....David
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Date: 3/10/2013 6:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Nicely done. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 3/10/2013 4:47:00 AM
Love this story!Congrats Isaiah on your win in the contest.
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Date: 3/10/2013 12:03:00 AM
Reading this again, I like it even better!! Congrats for your win in my contest. I love how you summed it all up at the end there!
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Date: 2/20/2013 6:37:00 AM
Wow, you did a fantastic job with this form! I love stories of ship wrecks and lost treasure. I really like the subtle rhyme throughout - and the last line is perfect.
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Date: 2/20/2013 3:25:00 AM
Isaiah, a very good poem, a little sad. - Have a nice day! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/19/2013 11:38:00 PM
amazing write ...thank you for sharing your great poem dear friend Isaiah <3 :) Sk
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Date: 2/19/2013 11:32:00 PM
Wonderful tale..I like the words you ve used to create the tritina..Lovely.
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