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Past of Horror

I wake up with another tear
for I have again, relived the nightmare
will it ever leave me with any way to see
when will I again be able to see my family
the past is forgiven
so why is it still living
my heart was so broken
but soon after it was frozen
let it lie and the past die
for I have a life to live with
but the past is still being relived
how do I stop this past of torture
so I can find my new future

Copyright © D.A Hopkins | Year Posted 2013

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John Ginesi Date: 6/20/2013 8:21:00 PM Hey Denise, you made two spelling errors in this work, this won't impress your peers, you must proof read your work as your presentation will suffer many bad comments, poets are picky at times and can dish out plenty of critisism, so please be careful before posting. Try not to end with a question as it leaves people up in the air at the end, finish with a punch line, a surprise, it works for me. John Login to Reply John Ginesi Date: 6/20/2013 8:34:00 PM I forgot to comment on your poem itself, it is quite inspirational and you do have to let go of your past or you can never move on with your life.

Kim Morrison Date: 6/8/2013 8:06:00 AM A lot of heart in this little poem and one can sense what you are feeling. You have some rhyming lines and one good internal rhyme, but this one has the feel of free verse. Good job! Kim Login to Reply