Passing

In the twilight between waking and forever sleep
Her hand flies distractedly to the wild strands of gray 
As if to restore her perfect coif, or clutching a tissue 
Dabs delicately at her nose, oblivious to the tubes that tether her to life

I study the exquisitely ravaged face
And can still see the echoes of the lovely form
That was once a beautiful woman in the full-flower of youth,
Her thick, chestnut hair framing a doll-like face

Eyes closed, her brow furrows and she murmurs softly
Muttering nonsense words about frozen soup and hard bread
She is in some faraway place – perhaps the ghetto of her childhood
Where food was scarce and siblings died for lack of it

The irony is not lost on me that she has come full circle,
Though now the starvation that threatens her frail frame 
Is imposed not by outward circumstances
But by her own weakened will to sustain a stubborn life force

It is a fragile bond that holds her now to her bitter present
And soon, I think, she will drift off to a place I cannot fathom.
For it has been a long and arduous journey
And she is weary of the struggle.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 1/3/2014 4:07:00 PM
Woww, pretty intense...
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Date: 1/3/2014 4:17:00 PM
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Date: 1/1/2014 4:01:00 PM
Estelle, it is hard to live this way... Very deep a nice touch on the ending line. , I like your first poetic piece on the site, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 1/1/2014 7:10:00 AM
- Welcome to P-Soup, Estelle ! - A very well written poem !! :)) - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck !! - (Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours). - My first greeting to you from Norway. - I will come back to read more .... another day :) - All the best for the year 2014 ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/31/2013 8:35:00 PM
this is very deep, Estelle, been down that struggle many times before. , Hope you are enjoying the holidays, Your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, This is deep!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT"
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