One Way To Cede

It's the metal in my hand,
Like biting into an apple
The juice runs down my arm
Its nectar is what I need
To make me cede 

Wanting it to be shown
What it feels like to be me
In the moment, I’ll give up hope
This is the only way I know how to cope

Will you just help me please?
Wanting someone to see
and just know what I mean,
What its like to fall
With no pit that compares to be this deep
Just want to hear my voice
Loud and clear
But as long as I hang here
I have no control
But to watch myself tear

This is what I've become
What I've done
Don't be surprised
For once actually look with your eyes
And you'll see the real me
Showing all the signs
Now I just ask you please
Hear me and take me out of my misery 
Not asking to move a mountain over seas
Just lay it over me to let me be

Is it possible to think about anything but this?
Will the thought ever quit?
Pain over comes any thing
Including this

I want it to be seen
It’s how much it hurts
Not the scar it leaves behind,
But the stab that’s not seen
I will fall back into the hole
Hold my breath and do not breathe
Because today I wear my heart on my sleeve

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 7/28/2010 9:42:00 AM
ahhhh hon word 1...It's..it is....and I think you don't need the apostrophe in line 3 (sigh) check on the second one though (s, s', & 's always GET ME!) think ya might want concede in line 5 (Your form is rhyme) I am going to soup mail you the corrections dear. Light & Love
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Date: 7/20/2010 11:43:00 PM
Very, very well written. Damn good job.
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Date: 6/29/2010 10:07:00 AM
This is an excellent poem. I like the twist in the end. It really puts the icing on the cake. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Blessings, Joseph
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Date: 6/29/2010 9:07:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Kayla. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/27/2010 10:32:00 PM
Such a great write,, your first stanza was really good, enjoyed your write...P.D.
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