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On Winter's Road

the tires on black ice spin out of control. . . fresh snow swirls soft and white Written 12/7/13 looking out at a snowy street, For the monoku contest of Broken Wings

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Skat A

Date: 3/15/2014 10:12:00 AM

Hi Andrea .. Congratulations with your one amazing line....~SKAT~

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 3/13/2014 12:29:00 PM

Appropriate to remember the Winter of 2013 (and others). A well-done monoku and brevity piece. Cheers on your win.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/12/2014 8:37:00 AM

I like how you did this one, congratulations.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 3/10/2014 5:24:00 PM

andrea, this is cleverly written because you've used vivid contrast, black then white, and I also like your use of alliteration - congrats on your win! :)

Gary Watkins

Date: 3/10/2014 5:15:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. This is a very vivid line. Unfortunately, I am experiencing some of this in Colorado this time of the year.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/10/2014 4:45:00 PM

- One Amazing Line - Congratulations on your fine win, Andrea ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/10/2014 4:20:00 PM

Wow~~~Way to go..Sara

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/28/2013 11:57:00 PM

soup mail

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/27/2013 9:56:00 AM

I hope that a crash was not the end results..Enjoyed reading this one today..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page...Sara

Poet. Undertaker

Date: 12/20/2013 3:49:00 AM

an experience or an imagery what ever may be a great poem.penned very well.Excellent.(: ) Jenish.

Daver Austin

Date: 12/15/2013 1:30:00 PM

I couldn't stand to look either. Love, daver

Jack Horne

Date: 12/14/2013 3:47:00 PM

love this one. A big winner here. Not sure if I got the hang of monoku from Soup's instructions on form.

Robert Johnson

Date: 12/12/2013 2:20:00 PM

Drive careful. Hope your staying warm. My visit's are sporadic now, a little off the norm. Peace. :)

Wilma Neels

Date: 12/12/2013 7:20:00 AM

Awesome as usual Andrea, just popping in quickly on your side.. Sorry for the absence.. :) Wilma

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 12/11/2013 11:00:00 AM

nice Monoku friend Andrea. Advance Merry Christmas to you and to your family ;)

Monterey Sirak

Date: 12/11/2013 7:43:00 AM

Oh, this conjures up all kinds of images. Love it You should make this a new contest and ask for poems telling the backstory for being out on that winter's night.

Shane Cogan

Date: 12/11/2013 12:33:00 AM

Nice contrasts, Andrea.

Jon A Cavanaugh

Date: 12/9/2013 10:18:00 PM

Very nice and timely. I must be very careful this winter especially when walking.

Donna Jones

Date: 12/8/2013 7:58:00 PM

Very nice Andrea....describes the conditions around Oklahoma very well the last few day as well...

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/8/2013 7:25:00 PM

I enjoyed your verse this evening. Light & Love

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 12/8/2013 7:16:00 PM

Nice line for the contest, Andrea. Good luck!

Roger Horsch

Date: 12/8/2013 4:21:00 PM

Nice one Andrea, It's that time of year....Roger

Kathryn Collins

Date: 12/8/2013 9:39:00 AM

Dear Andrea - Beauty and the beast. I see a car silently hitting a tree and the snow carrying on as though nothing has happened. love, Kathy

Len Gasun

Date: 12/8/2013 9:26:00 AM

A very beautiful monoku poem which portraits a very beautiful picture my dear friend Andrea.I love the vicarious experience you've shared through this great form of poem. Good luck in the contest. and TYSM for sharing! Have a great wkend to u & your love ones! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/8/2013 2:33:00 AM

I like!