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On Track

cheese lies on the floor
mouse makes his way to the cheese
cat runs for the mouse

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  1. Date: 1/30/2012 8:18:00 PM
    Like Debra Tom and Jerry came to mind right away...LOL!

  1. Date: 1/30/2012 6:18:00 PM
    Made me smile. Thank you. Jim

  1. Date: 1/30/2012 8:33:00 AM
    My mind went immediately to Tom and Jerry !! Enjoyed !!

  1. Date: 1/29/2012 8:58:00 PM
    what a witty haiku! straight on the track. thank you for stopping by and your kind comments Carol. truly sorry i missed your soupmail from long ago.

  1. Date: 1/29/2012 1:44:00 PM
    Carol, Are you playing a game of cat & mouse with us...okay I love it. Craig

  1. Date: 1/29/2012 7:44:00 AM
    Simple but fantastic imagery, loved and enjoyed,bl

  1. Date: 1/28/2012 2:39:00 PM
    Great images with words........George

  1. Date: 1/28/2012 1:20:00 PM
    LOL, yes, I can picture this one! Thanks, Carol - enjoyed the contest

  1. Date: 1/28/2012 6:17:00 AM
    Haha....enjoyed this haiku very much Carol.

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 9:04:00 PM
    I once wrote about cheese but this really made me smile , thank you Carol Hugs Declan xx

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 8:38:00 PM
    haha, remember that song, the mouse takes the cheese? Kind of reminds me of that. CUTE title for this!

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 5:40:00 PM
    And the chase is on. Good job here Carol. You paint quite a cute picture. God Bless, JB

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 5:10:00 PM
    this is a very interesting poem. has lots of action. did the mouse get away?? Hope you have a very, berry weekend. Take care lol, Jancarl

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 4:54:00 PM
    This is so cute. I can picture this scene in my head. Love it. Thank you for all your kind, encouraging comments. God Bless. Love, Kim

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 4:54:00 PM
    There should be a cholesterol warning on the mouse...)

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 4:50:00 PM
    I find this a very appealing, "though cheesy" write Carol" ( ha ha )....Its got that mature taste," 'can't help these comments..!

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 3:48:00 PM
    Wonder who will be the winner?..Will it be the one with the longest legs or possibly the lightest weight?...Enjoyed reading and then letting the questions flow...Sara

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 2:48:00 PM
    LOL This is adorable, Carol! Love it. Love you as well, Carolyn

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 2:30:00 PM
    Can we say TRAP!! Great creative poem Carol! Awesome Work!!