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Odd Girl

I watch another lonely face walk past my window pane
Drenched, covered in misery as she makes her way through the rain
I listen to the thoughts bounce around in her brain
I try not to burden my cheek with a tear stain
I try not to feel her pain
It'll turn me insane

She dances in puddles
With a boring frown
Scars seeping through
Her soaked morning gown
She walks into traffic
Looking down
She forces smiles
While her blue eyes drown

She's odd
But she's so pretty
She has all of my pity
She's strange
She's got a different look
And I don't know why
But she's got me hooked

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  1. Date: 7/1/2011 2:24:00 PM
    Very mysterious! I love it though....

  1. Date: 6/30/2011 2:08:00 PM
    I agree; a very vivid poem. Romantic and mysterious. Love it! Always Laura

  1. Date: 6/30/2011 6:53:00 AM
    you create a vivid scene. wonder what it is you are connecting with with her. this is not a criticism, but have you thought about taking out the first I don't know why in the 3rd stanza and then reversing your last 2 lines? It might make it a more powerful ending if you don't say i don't know twice and end on being hooked. just a thought...btw, I liked your face on my comments. so cute :p

  1. Date: 6/30/2011 12:22:00 AM
    great poem! very original!