Ocean

Waves carry away sand but a few grains left behind... memories in my mind.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/25/2013 4:46:00 PM

Afroze, had this been for the contest? I don't see any congrats here, but I have an idea what may have happened. I did not notice this the first time I saw it, but you have repeated "a few" in line two, and if not for that, I think it could have been a winning ocean haiku,

Afroze Ali
Date: 4/25/2013 7:49:00 PM

Oops yes that was by mistake. Didn't check. Thanks Andrea for letting me know.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/17/2013 11:59:00 PM

this is a really lovely haiku for the contest. Sorry you missed out on my faves list, my friend! Keep the title of your poem I faved in your mind in case I open up that contest again.