No More Fun

As a Christmas gift  he got a gun
He played with it and had lots of fun

To a little boy it was such joy
To have  it as a toy

But when the boy became a man
Things didn't go as he had planned

And so this young man got a gun
A single shot, his life was done
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 2/26/2013 4:46:00 PM
Yours was my favorite of the couplets because it packed such a PUNCH in such few lines. Congrats, Joseph. (it reminded me of the style of one of my favorite poems Richard Cory)
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Date: 2/26/2013 11:20:00 AM
a very informative poem friend Joseph, thanks for sharing and Big Congratulations on your grand win. Cheers!! Maria
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Date: 2/26/2013 10:37:00 AM
Many congratulations on your number 1 Joseph xx
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Date: 2/25/2013 9:07:00 PM
Joseph, Congratulations with your winning poem in Rix's "A "Gun"-o-ku " contest. Goodnight~ LINDA
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Date: 1/27/2013 5:23:00 PM
rereading this one. Sure hope to see it on the winners list.
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Date: 1/26/2013 8:12:00 PM
This is so relevant, Joseph. And I can't help but wonder if the truth is so hard to see or are the advocates just digging their feet in the mud. Very well done! Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise
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Date: 1/26/2013 12:57:00 PM
This is a nicely dramatic one on the topic of why guns are bad!! I enjoyed it.
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Date: 1/25/2013 2:17:00 PM
In Norway, we have strict rules for weapons, and that should every country have - Good luck in the contest. - Have a wonderful weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/25/2013 7:25:00 AM
Happens way too much, even one lost soul is too much. Light & Love
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