No More Fun

As a Christmas gift he got a gun He played with it and had lots of fun To a little boy it was such joy To have it as a toy But when the boy became a man Things didn't go as he had planned And so this young man got a gun A single shot, his life was done

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/26/2013 4:46:00 PM

Yours was my favorite of the couplets because it packed such a PUNCH in such few lines. Congrats, Joseph. (it reminded me of the style of one of my favorite poems Richard Cory)

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 2/26/2013 11:20:00 AM

a very informative poem friend Joseph, thanks for sharing and Big Congratulations on your grand win. Cheers!! Maria

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 2/26/2013 10:37:00 AM

Many congratulations on your number 1 Joseph xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/25/2013 9:07:00 PM

Joseph, Congratulations with your winning poem in Rix's "A "Gun"-o-ku " contest. Goodnight~ LINDA

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/27/2013 5:23:00 PM

rereading this one. Sure hope to see it on the winners list.

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/26/2013 8:12:00 PM

This is so relevant, Joseph. And I can't help but wonder if the truth is so hard to see or are the advocates just digging their feet in the mud. Very well done! Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/26/2013 12:57:00 PM

This is a nicely dramatic one on the topic of why guns are bad!! I enjoyed it.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/25/2013 2:17:00 PM

In Norway, we have strict rules for weapons, and that should every country have - Good luck in the contest. - Have a wonderful weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/25/2013 7:25:00 AM

Happens way too much, even one lost soul is too much. Light & Love