My Fair Maiden

I called upon yonder window That was up to high for me to be For my maiden gracefully sleeps there In her bed,beside the sea I asked her to come hither For her beautiful face I yearned to see Twas yawning in the morning dew As she slowly came to the window for me To my amazement came forth a ragged wench Whos hair was as raged as the sea With eyes that were burnt as nightposts To bloodshot and squinty to even see For this was not my fair maiden? Whos beauty would forever be But a drunken harlot who came hither That she spent the night with instead of me My heart now broken to pieces Wondering how could this tragedy be? For my maiden now sleeps with a harlot? Without the love that she once gave to me? My mind was now enraged So I dashed for the wrestling sea With thoughts of drowning this useless body That's no longer good enough for my maiden to see With water just over waist height And a large wave about to crash over me I heard a calling from yonder window Twas my beautiful maiden as I turned to see Her beautiful eyes in such distress Her beautiful hair flowing so care free Twas the beauty of my fair maiden That I had called upon yonder window to see For the thoughts that raced through my mind Evidently,weren't truely what happend to be For it was her promiscuous sister Who had come from the other side of the sea My heart now rebuilt with a sigh of love A large wave suddenly crashes over me The last thing I saw was my fair maiden As my lifeless body is carried out by the sea
DannyBoy:1-24-13

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Date: 2/20/2016 11:18:00 PM
Beautiful poem. Nice imagination and visualisation. Well expressed sticking to rhythmic endings. I liked it a lot.
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Date: 2/15/2016 6:15:00 AM
lovely piece Dan, blessed piece indeed!
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Date: 5/31/2013 12:14:00 AM
This is truly awesome Dan, reminds me of Annabel Lee by Poe ;} and I've wrote poems of by the deep blue sea. Hey did you see Mermaids on discover channel OR animal planet ? You can also check it out on utube. your poem is going to fav's ;}
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Date: 1/31/2013 9:47:00 AM
amazing poetry Dan, love this as the story unfolds, to its tragic end..
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Date: 1/26/2013 7:19:00 AM
Love the flow, sadness, humour, but also love that this poem makes me think of living in another time in history - gr8 poem Dan! - Shaz
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Date: 1/25/2013 9:28:00 PM
Hello Dan, a very sad imagery... almost like in the movies... true love... and ends so epicly...xox~PD
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Date: 1/25/2013 2:41:00 PM
love it mate ...tragic touch in it...but that is life
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Date: 1/24/2013 8:44:00 PM
So sad! Happens every day everywhere... it's called life! Cheers, Jack
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Date: 1/24/2013 7:58:00 PM
A sad poem where fate plays a terrible trick... nice work Dan ... Terry (see 2 mails)
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Date: 1/24/2013 5:29:00 PM
This is hilarious with a grain of truth. How many relationships have been dashed by the dreaded green eyed monster.
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Date: 1/24/2013 2:45:00 AM
A well written poem Dan, but so sad so sad. - oxox / / f.e.f. Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/24/2013 12:30:00 AM
Awwwww thats sad. Well done Dan ... Seren
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Date: 1/23/2013 11:48:00 PM
Sad bt well penned Dan!
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Date: 1/23/2013 11:57:00 PM
Thank you very much...
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