Magic Carpet

So you rode the magic carpet And you sailed above the skies You were taken by the beauty You were blinded by the lies As you soared up through the heavens You could sense the angels sighs They could see into your future And they witnessed loves demise Now you head towards disaster With no one to hear your cries As you cling on to your memories And the cold wind burns your eyes

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Jon Arno

Date: 1/27/2012 6:35:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning entry. Good job. Best regards, Jon

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2012 6:14:00 PM

I really like this and what you are conveying with it, john. Congrats on a well deserved win.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/25/2012 2:18:00 PM

Excellent imagination in this one..Good flow and rhythm..Enjoyed..Congrats on your win.Sara

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/25/2012 12:34:00 PM

And you have sailed along with the most beautiful words, to the top of the winner's circle!! Lovely poem! Congratulations!

Bob Quigley

Date: 1/25/2012 9:56:00 AM

Really enjoyed this John Congratulations

Lizanne Scholtz

Date: 1/25/2012 8:13:00 AM

Wonderful, congratulations on your win John. Elizabeth

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/25/2012 6:00:00 AM

Congratulations on the win in Brian's "UPTO Fourteen" contest John W. Love, Carol

Carol Eastman

Date: 1/20/2012 10:54:00 AM

Your works have such power... You can say a lot in a few words. That takes talent... and perhaps experience.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/25/2011 9:55:00 PM

John,, not a ride i want..lol.., thank you for sharing.. May the magic of writing fill your days here on the soup. May all your dreams come true this holiday season. I hope you are enjoying the blessings that Christmas brings.. filling our hearts with hope and joy, just take care of yourself... once again enjoyed your poem,,always,..p.d.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 12/25/2011 4:41:00 PM

it sounds like you're going through something sad, which i'm sorry to hear. i guess it's good to get it out in poetry, though. i hope it helped! you express yourself very beautifully........