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Lovers' Quarrel

The walls are closing in.
The walls are closing in.
Yet broken hearts will die much quicker
Crush me from within.                                 (THIS CAN'T BE HAPPENING)

There is no escape. 
There is no escape.
I feel drastic, torn and troubled,
hopeless in this state.                                   (YOU DON'T KNOW HOW THIS FEELS)

We don’t mess with fate.
We don’t mess with fate.
Someday we’ll be six feet under,
smothered in this hate.                                (DON'T MAKE ME BEG)

You can’t understand.
You’ll never understand.
Now you leave me lonesome,
frightened....
PLEASE!!!!.... just hold my hand.                    (I LOVE YOU)

I never said I’m sorry.
I never said I’m sorry.
But I’m not one for compromise
if you won't say you love me...
 
So say it to this gun.                                     (RIGHT NOW DAMMIT!!!)
Say it to my gun.
I dare you look me in the eyes,
and tell me I'm the one.

Copyright © Yoni Dvorkis | Year Posted 2009

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Jay Loveless Date: 11/6/2009 11:17:00 AM my god... Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 9/22/2009 4:38:00 PM goodness..death threats do not usually illicit love dear one??? You are just being dramatic! phewwww Light & Love & lots of make up Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/13/2009 5:16:00 AM Interesting presentation of feelings that are being torn apart and we've all been there unless we have lived in a vaccum. Keep writing. Sara Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 8/11/2009 4:36:00 PM Interesting and suspenseful, Yoni. Too bad lovers' quarrels often end up this way. I can see this argument playing out. Total realism. Great write, Yoni! Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 8/9/2009 4:06:00 AM Another gem from your pen, very clever>>James Login to Reply

Veronica Joseph Date: 8/7/2009 7:13:00 AM very powerful portrait of anger and frustration, the extreme fear of losing the one you love who wont or cant tell you how they feel - one way or the other. Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 8/4/2009 12:55:00 PM yike I hope you are feeling better! Light & Love Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 8/3/2009 10:46:00 AM You sound a little like Edgar Allan Poe, in this one, Yoni, Moses Login to Reply

Denis Joe Date: 8/1/2009 1:20:00 PM A great piece of poetry. the flavour is very Japanese, especially in the repeated lines. I like that approach as it forces the sound and feeling of the statement. The side titles work well as if created a poem out of the other. A really imaginative work. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 7/31/2009 2:01:00 PM i love this poem,im not afraid to quarrel,im a fraid if i dont make up,its good to bottle up sometimes and after make peace again...good format i love it Yoni and this quarrel was fun--charma Login to Reply

Yoni Dvorkis Date: 7/31/2009 1:29:00 PM Sorry for the confusion, this isn't a real event. It's sort of modeled after Nine Inch Nails 'The Downward Spiral' which put me in a slightly more demented state of mind as only Trent Reznor knows how to do... Login to Reply

Michael Jordan Date: 7/31/2009 1:14:00 PM Yoni - You know relationships are not only the hardest thing in our lives they are also the most important in many different ways - your poem is deep with emotion and your expression of these emotions is excellent - i hope that you guys are able to reach a compromise through communication that enables your love to continue and grow - God Bless, MJ Login to Reply