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Love Will Triumph

The fire goes unlit, within its granite frame heated is the argument, cold the man. Husband mine, please accept this suitors claim for he is worthy of your daughter Ann. See her downcast face, her melancholy, she sickens so and I've done all I can. Raise her ivory form, a father's glory accept her young man, he's come hat in hand. Let's end this day with a ribald story of how you've gifted what you once had banned. Husband mine, relent and let love have sway. Light the fire let the lovers flame be fanned let this fine young couple wed without delay.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 10/5/2013 8:52:00 PM
Interesting way to tell the story, as a compact monologue. You did a good job of fitting a whole plot into the limited number of lines, avoiding any awkwardness that could possibly have resulted.
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Date: 10/2/2013 3:46:00 PM
I think this is very elegantly penned and totally in keeping with the era and the painting - congrats on your win! :)
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Date: 10/1/2013 6:53:00 PM
enjoyed your take on the painting...great write...congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/1/2013 5:08:00 PM
VEry good usage of the terza rima form, Debs. I like how you told the story. Congrats.
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Date: 9/22/2013 5:01:00 PM
This is a very fine piece of poetry, and I think it represents the painting very well. Fantastic work! I wish you good luck in the contest!...I have also entered with a poem titled, "Love Will Triumph".
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Date: 9/7/2013 6:34:00 PM
A wonderful and impressive entry for the contest Debbie. Sure to get noticed, especially in the form you chose. I loved it!
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Date: 9/7/2013 2:59:00 PM
such a gentle yet firm plea... love must be given freely to find joy; a poetic delight, debbie... many thanks for including me in your line-up; i had a hard time doing it but felt real good you resonated with it... :) huggs
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Date: 9/6/2013 7:34:00 PM
The title says it all! Your eloquence says it even better...... and as a postscript, my gratitude for helping me along the way...I was stirred by your Walking Softly contest, and honored by my placement. Thanks so much! You have always encouraged me to better myself..I'm very grateful!
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Date: 9/6/2013 4:26:00 PM
FORGOT TO GIVE IT A 777777777! :)
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Date: 9/6/2013 4:25:00 PM
Debbie!!!! This is for the contest? It really is a great write. You captured every nuance of the painting so well. :) I'm here to thank you FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART for the place you gave me on the SIJO contest. I'm honored, humbled, and thrilled! You have NO idea. My Korean friends thought I didn't have the ghost of a chance! The lovely Sijo you posted were inspiring, as well as your personal encouragement. THANK YOU, Debbie!!!! HUGSSSSSSS
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Date: 9/5/2013 10:20:00 AM
This is such an eloquent gift of inspiration. I admire your talent ...Thank you for the indepth comments on my poem 'Until They Shine'... I wrote a reply to your comments and thank you so much for the insight :)
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Date: 9/4/2013 8:56:00 PM
wonderful write Debbie....best wishes
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Date: 9/1/2013 7:00:00 AM
I like it, Deb. Very gentle. Let the couple do what they want to do. This reminds me of Romeo and Juliet for some reason :)
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Date: 8/31/2013 5:10:00 PM
wow, you did an awesome job with this one, Deb!!! Exceptional.
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Date: 8/31/2013 7:19:00 AM
lovely message....To see the happiness in our daughter's eyes even if what she wants isn t what we aimed for..Beautiful thoughts penned.
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Date: 8/31/2013 1:06:00 AM
Children always bring together what the devil devides. Justice go along with it.
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Date: 8/30/2013 7:35:00 PM
Hi Debbie, Nice write of love and acceptance,, Ken
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Date: 8/30/2013 7:18:00 PM
Fine understanding between the couple to release love,
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