Love Note

I found your cuff link glinting like a lonely star on the closet floor looking as lost as I feel pining for your star-bright smiles For Rick's love note/tanka contest

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 8/10/2013 2:58:00 PM

Cute! "...like a lonely star on the closet floor..." a cuff link, very nice!!! MC

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 7/17/2013 12:24:00 PM

Positively resplendent! The loneliness in this poem can be distinctly felt! Hmmph... you won another contest. I am getting jealous. Maybe you could coach me in the finer points of poetry. ~ Did you know that you are the absolute best commentator on the soup? I was pleased as punch and nearly et my hat when I read your last one.

Adarsh Raj

Date: 6/25/2013 11:57:00 PM

Beautiful....congrats on your win:):):):)Adarsh

Elaine George

Date: 6/23/2013 6:42:00 PM

Paints a very vivid picture, Many congrats on your win, Heather. Elaine George.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2013 12:06:00 AM

I remember this one from before. Glad it made the list. It really is cute. Congrats, my friend.

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/22/2013 5:30:00 PM

Such a melancholy picture, Heather. Well done! Congrats on your win! Love, KIm

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/22/2013 4:39:00 PM

Oh, yes........a keepsake left behind...how touching this is!! Great poem, Heather!! Congratulations!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/22/2013 12:06:00 PM

Wow, Heather, this is so beautiful..congrats. BG

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/22/2013 10:22:00 AM

:) That last line, Heather....how beautiful! Congrats, sweetie! You are amazing!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/21/2013 3:21:00 PM

Oh, I LOVE yours. So glad to have seen this. One of my favorites so far in the contest.

Painted Hunter

Date: 6/17/2013 12:13:00 PM

That's a winner. There's a lot going on there...it's great!

Mario De Paz

Date: 6/17/2013 10:42:00 AM

A love note every lover would appreciate

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/17/2013 9:40:00 AM

oh wow, this is just perfect in every way, heather - "glinting like a lonely star" is a wonderful simile, and "star-bright smiles" is spot on, linking in nicely with that second line; can't see this as anything other than a top ranking tanka, great work :)

Poet Tacito

Date: 6/17/2013 8:12:00 AM

The simple things, the strongest memories. Beautiful!