Lifting the Fog

Sitting before the mountain bare A single thread, the clear stream runs cold Until the mists had cleared the air And the grey peaks their heads unfold White clean snow floating like a dream Uncovering and flowing like cream.
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Date 12-23-13 Fifth Place win Contest: One in Five by Andrea
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 9/18/2014 9:53:00 PM
Supreme images used to create a winning entry..... Great work, Doctor..... Jake
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Date: 4/22/2014 8:07:00 AM
Dr. Ram Such a descriptive and charming write. The imagery allows the reader to feel they are in this calm and serene scene with you. Thank you for the great comment on my Cupids Arrow poem.
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Date: 2/11/2014 7:02:00 PM
Dr, good on the imagery... ~ Love ~ SKAT
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Date: 1/19/2014 3:05:00 PM
This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara
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Date: 1/12/2014 6:06:00 PM
Very melodic! perhaps there's a better word than cream? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 1/12/2014 5:33:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Dr Ram
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Date: 1/12/2014 3:44:00 PM
Congratulations Dr Ram...very nicely written. .great images..
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Date: 1/12/2014 11:25:00 AM
Avery well written poem Dr Ram, congrats on your win.
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Date: 1/12/2014 10:29:00 AM
Great imagery, congratulations Dr. Ram
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Date: 1/11/2014 9:27:00 PM
dr. Ram, I almost put this lower because you mixed past tense into the third line by using had instead of have. However, your interesting imagery was so awesome to me. I just loved the last two lines of this. Gosh, I loved the first part too. I could just picture the stream as a thread of water! Congrats on your win in my contest.
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Date: 1/10/2014 8:13:00 AM
Good job on this one....
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Date: 12/27/2013 8:16:00 PM
you paint a beautiful image with your words...i picked this one because of your title, the poem did not disappoint.. enjoyed the read!
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Date: 12/27/2013 4:47:00 AM
a few words but so many depictions of wonderful nature
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Date: 12/26/2013 3:40:00 AM
Very beautiful piece Dr. Ram
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Date: 12/25/2013 7:55:00 PM
Love the title mixing with the mountain stream by the mountain...beautiful picture Dr Ram...
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Date: 12/24/2013 6:08:00 PM
A great image you have painted thanks for sharing
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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 8:58:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 12/24/2013 3:50:00 PM
I like the imagery in your poem "white clean snow" - lovely. Have a Happy Christmas, best wishes from Linda (Lochcarron, Scotland) x
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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 8:59:00 PM
Thanks, Linda
Date: 12/24/2013 12:02:00 PM
Absolutely brilliant, Ram. Any comment would give it injustice. "The gray peaks their heads unfold" Astounding. love, Kathy
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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 9:00:00 PM
Thanks for the comments, Kathryn
Date: 12/24/2013 12:59:00 AM
Dr RAm, Guess what? , The end of the year is approaching :) and there's no way I'm letting this year end, without dropping by with SMILES and CHRISTMAS CHEERS. Thank You for making this a great year for ALL OF US. --- May magic fill your days and all your dreams come true this holiday season. MERRY CHRISTAMS <3 Love Linda -The Sweetest Poet Destroyer
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Date: 12/23/2013 6:36:00 PM
Merry Christmas & Happy Holiday!, Light & Love
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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/23/2013 11:58:00 PM
Merry Christmas and happy holidays, Deb, Light and Love
Date: 12/23/2013 11:43:00 AM
Beautiful, Dr Ram. Flowing...sweet and clear! :) I enjoyed this!!!
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Date: 12/23/2013 11:12:00 AM
Sweet poems with snow, dream and cream...Enjoyed your rhyme dear.
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Date: 12/23/2013 9:07:00 AM
Ahh!!! Great rhythm and flow to this one..Enjoyed reading it this morn..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 12/23/2013 8:48:00 AM
It is my pleasure to read your poetry..and I thankyou for it!!
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