Leaving Landfall At Dawn
Looking back, a morning mist hangs
In the deeply shadowed valleys
From the deck of ‘Atlanta,’
Land recedes on the power of wind
In the deeply shadowed valleys
The sun is slowly awakening trees
Land recedes on the power of wind
Sails respond to a surging sea
The sun is slowly awakening trees
From the deck of ‘Atlanta,’
Sails respond to a surging sea
Looking back, a morning mist hangs
For Julia Ward’s Sailing Contest
Deadline: Tuesday, August 23, 2022
For Russell's Complete your poem Contest
Previous poem Russell Sivey’s 5 minute Challenge
Sailing
She misses the morning mist;
the deep, shadowed vista of valleys
hair flying
across her face like curtains
her papa at the helm of ‘Atlanta’.
passing plagues of flies at the bridge
where fishermen cleaned their catches.
Each day like a page, once turned
no chance of ever re-tracing.
5/13/2013
Using this word list I wrote for 5 minutes
Mist, helm, part, page, plaque, hair, traces, bridge, curtain, vista
For my second poem I decided to abandon the word list and changed the form from Free verse to a Pantoum. I also made a new title.
I liked how the repeating lines gave a feeling of looking back to the land, feeling the wind take the boat and watch the land receding. I am really enjoying trying new forms.
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