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Just Checking In

Just Checking In Story/poem. A Minister was passing by his Church in the middle of the day. He decided to go and check to to see who had come in to pray. He notice a man comming through the back door and down the aisle. The Minister frowned as he notice the man had not shaved in days and was wearing shaby clothes. The man knelt down for a moment than got up and left. In the days that followed he notice - the man came in at the same time everyday. He did the same thing - knelt down for a moment, got up and walked away. One day he thought that the man might want to rob the Church. He stopped the man and asked him - why he only stayed for a moment? The man told him - my name is Jim and I work down the road in the factory, lunch time is only 1/2 an hr, but it's the only time I have to pray. The factory is far away. This is just what I say. I just came in to tell you Lord how happy I have been, since we found eachother's friendship and you took away my sin. I don't know much of how to pray. But I think about you everyday - So JESUS - this is Jim just checking in. The Minister felt foolish then. He knelt at the alter and repeated Jim's prayer, but one day Jim stopped comming. The Minister got worried. He went to the factory and asked about him. They told him that Jim had an accident and was in the hospital. The Minister went to see him. He asked the nurse how he was doing - she said he was getting better, but could not understand why he was so happy, when no one came to see him. The Minister went to his bedside. Old Jim spoke up with a smile. He said the nurse don't know, but everyday at noon a dear friend of mine comes to see me. He sits by me, takes my hand and says to me - I just came again to tell you Jim - how happy I have been. Since we found this friendship and I took away your sin. I love to hear you pray. I think about you every day and so Jim - this is JESUS checking in today... 10/06/2013 Note: I did not write this poem. It was sent to me a long time ago I don't know who wrote it. I just thought it was beautiful and I wanted you to read it too. It was a lot longer, but I made it shorter. I hope you like it....

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  1. Date: 10/14/2013 11:33:00 AM
    wonderful story Lucilla...

  1. Date: 10/8/2013 7:17:00 AM
    a very enjoyable piece

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 6:34:00 PM
    It is a really cool story regardless of where it came from!!

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 6:30:00 PM
    This is beautiful Lucilla! Thanks for sharing. You warmed my heart tonight. Love and blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 3:02:00 PM
    Hola Lucilla, Wonderful story poem..Thanks for sharing this one.. Ken

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 2:28:00 PM
    WOW!!!! What a beautiful poem. Thanks for posting.

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 1:08:00 PM
    Yes, loved much your poem. It's just beautiful penned with reality. Thanks for sharing. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 9:47:00 PM
    Wow, this is a very touching write, I'm so glad that you shared it with all of us, it means a lot to me! I am moved by this tremendous poem my friend, Thank you!!

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 7:17:00 PM
    - A good story to share Lucilla, thank you my dear friend. - Take care of yourself! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 5:07:00 PM
    Hello Lucy, thank you for sharing this story poem... amazing how such a wonderful poem was passed down.. I did enjoyed... you are a light my friend... hope you are well...Linda

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 4:43:00 PM
    You brought me tears. :*) Have a blessed day.