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In Good Conscience

IN GOOD CONSCIENCE
Heavily tread, are those small fractious steps On the stairs to my own peace of mind The sound of transgressions that I'd rather forget is the pounding of a most clamorous kind The dialogue I'm having, within my own self drums on the door of the closed minded truth I try to rewrite scripts, shoving back on the shelf But the turbulence shakes them loose No matter, how buried, how deep I will hide them My conscience can shovel them out That child inside me, denies what was done then But can't deafen the voices that shout I profess to regret many sins I've committed The most difficult task is one of admitting
__________________________________ Revised 4/6/13__ __________________________________ (Original Poem....Diminished Hexaverse) MY CONSCIENCE heavy on the stairs the sound of my thoughts- my own voice resounds and pounds on my door of solitary the dialogue within myself never perjured is translucent I profess to launder past regrets if stains can be cleansed _____________ 2/14/11 ___________________________________________________________ Both poems submitted for Roy Jerden's Contest: "Makeover"

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Date: 4/19/2015 2:00:00 PM
Sorry that I am so late on the congrats, just recently found out the contest was finalized.. Big congrats on your win!!
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Date: 4/18/2015 5:28:00 PM
Wonderful win... Linda
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Date: 4/14/2015 5:23:00 PM
Carrie, congratulations on your win in the makeover contest! I really like both, but your revision is excellent! The message in your Sonnet is one we can all relate to. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/13/2015 7:45:00 PM
I love both but the original leaves more hooks for the reader to paint themselves and their own issues into the picture. Congrad's on your winning verse! Light & Love
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Date: 4/13/2015 2:58:00 AM
Great poem! It is more profound and inspiring. Congrats, Carrie!
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Date: 4/12/2015 6:33:00 PM
Carrie, I guess I wasn't paying attention. I thought the second poem was the one revised for the contest as it is at the bottom, as the rules specify. That's the one I like better. Now I'm not sure exactly what is going on, as the previous comments from 2013 imply that there were two poems already at that time. Did you revise anything for this contest?
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Date: 4/12/2015 7:36:00 PM
And thank you, Roy, I am always redoing, and trying to better my poems, it is always a work in progress.
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Date: 4/12/2015 7:32:00 PM
So sorry for the confusion, Roy, and yes, this is a poem I wrote a long time ago, revised once for Debbie, and then redid the wording altogether in the Diminished hexaverse version for yours. It has had more makeovers than myself... But I can see I should have used another poem for a makeover this time perhaps....trying to get blood out of an old turnip !
Date: 5/1/2013 5:58:00 PM
Carrie, i like your winning poem in Debbie's contest... take care..PD
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Date: 4/27/2013 5:35:00 AM
Great winning work..It always amazes me that God has already forgiven us but we can't forgive ourself of transgressions..Great work..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 4/26/2013 12:03:00 AM
Big Congrats on your win Carrie~A.O
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Date: 4/25/2013 4:15:00 PM
Well done, congratulations.
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Date: 4/25/2013 3:35:00 PM
Aren't we all different [I hate brevity LOL hugs to Kathy] and I have to tell you that second one is killer good.And you too know Deb likes her sonnets! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/25/2013 1:45:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie Each poem clarifies the other. SuZ
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Date: 4/25/2013 10:08:00 AM
Many congratulations Carrie luv , well done
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Date: 4/13/2013 8:22:00 AM
Carrie - How fortunate for me I read these wonderful works which mirror me in all ways. Your style of expressing these thoughts in such beauty is superb. I think I'm partial to the first one because I am a great fan of brevity. One stands alone without the other is a glories message. love, Kathy
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Date: 4/8/2013 6:29:00 PM
yep, this is an excellent example of a metamorph that got even better!!
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Date: 4/8/2013 11:11:00 AM
an excellent metamorph...aren't these contests addictive?
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Date: 4/8/2013 3:35:00 AM
spoilt for choice love both of these Carrie,, but i also love sonnets and wow this is good...
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:12:00 PM
Very awesome Carrie....admitting you are human requires no regrets though...hope you are not being hard on yourself....you are sweet.....Donna
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Date: 4/7/2013 9:49:00 AM
Carrie dear I DO like the sonnet better, how about you? which do you like better? PS ;) Thanks so much for stopping by my verses. Light & Love
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Date: 4/7/2013 7:44:00 AM
carrie love both of these,one of the best I have read for the contest, good luck...David
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Date: 4/6/2013 8:39:00 PM
Carrie, i love the way you beautifully transformed the poem. But, somehow I love the first one you wrote. a good conscience should always stay clean... always~ Linda
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