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"in Control"

her tears crash to her cheeks and burn like hot flick of the cigarette that she is holding then they stop at her frozen lips she sobs without a sound for exactly two minutes two minutes longer than it took him to die with a swish she leaves the bathroom and smiles at her new guy....... no trace of her real self...... will he ever see janetta

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Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 10/4/2009 9:13:00 AM

Call it poetic justice. Congrats on the feature. Vince

P Sheart

Date: 10/3/2009 6:38:00 AM

Amazing poetry!! Congrats Love Light Truth Patricia

Raul Moreno

Date: 10/2/2009 12:27:00 PM

Janetta, congratulations on making the first round of the contest...Raul

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/27/2009 11:59:00 AM

nicely penned, congrats on being a featured artist.

Katherine Stella

Date: 9/27/2009 5:58:00 AM

congrats janetta on being featured this week and also congrats on placing in semi finals keep up the great work this was very touching

Date: 9/25/2009 6:55:00 PM

Janetta, I just wanted to drop by and add--Congratulations on making it through the first round in the contest. Good luck in the finals! Karen

James Fraser

Date: 9/25/2009 4:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week >> James

Elaine George

Date: 9/25/2009 4:15:00 AM

Dear Janetta, Best wishes through to the next round. Love, Lainie

Date: 9/24/2009 1:52:00 PM

Such a sad situation. The short lines work well in this poem. Congratulations on having it featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/24/2009 12:36:00 PM

Janetta, congrats on being featured this week...Raul

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2009 10:53:00 AM

Congratulations on your poem making it through the first round Janetta.Wishing you the best in the finals. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2009 9:29:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Janetta. Love, Carol

Elaine George

Date: 9/24/2009 6:54:00 AM

Dear Janetta, Congatulations on this well derserved feature of the week. lainie

Des Juan Richardson

Date: 5/16/2009 11:58:00 AM

Janetta, this is an amazing write. I visualized the entire scene. I am sure he regrets losing you. This was powerful and cleverly written. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. I have been out of the loop for a while but plan to start posting again. ~Des Juan

Jeanmarie Marchese

Date: 1/9/2009 8:08:00 AM

Janetta, this.is.brilliant. Once again, I am in awe of your ability to capture me, twist me, and understand me. You've done nothing less than create those ten million little voices that remain silent in the embrace of love, yet scream for that which they have lost. You rule the written word here, my Dear, and you're beautiful. love.me.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 12/21/2008 4:57:00 PM

This is remarkable. i am here on the soup and I was looking over my blogs and I saw your comment so i clicked on your name and this poem was a pleasant surprise on this Sunday evening. Very well written and I love how it all unfolded. i could see it all. Great job with this piece.

Sharon Winter

Date: 11/6/2008 5:57:00 AM

Wow Janetta, this is heavy duty. In control in a not so good way, perhaps not really in control at all. So sad, so well written. (Certainly hope it is not you but rather imagination.) Must thank you so much for that lovely comment. You have no idea how much it means to me. Love, Shar

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 11/6/2008 5:09:00 AM

That one is scary. Can't even take a decent shower anymore. This ones kind of different than your other poems. Interesting write. Vince