In a Hotel Room

A couple checked into a room
In some small town hotel.
They settled in but were disturbed
By some unpleasant smell.

They checked the bathroom – it was clean.
The closet was, as well;
But clearly there was something off – 
Just what, they couldn’t tell.

Before they turned the bedspread back,
To cozy up a spell,
The husband peeked beneath the bed
And let out quite a yell.

His wife crouched down and what she saw
Was something to repel – 
There was a corpse, perhaps the room’s
Most recent clientele.

This story’s true and creeps me out – 
There is no parallel.
As for the couple, I’m quite sure
They beat a fast farewell.


for Black Eyed Susan's "In a Hotel Room" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 2/20/2013 1:52:00 AM
Many Congratulations on your win Ilene, sorry i am a bit late xx
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Date: 2/20/2013 1:31:00 AM
Good job! - Your hotel is 7 star! - Congratulations! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/19/2013 8:30:00 PM
yes, yes, it's great to see this one high on the list!! Congrats, my friend.
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Date: 2/19/2013 4:13:00 PM
Ilene, CONGRATULATIONS :-) ~ love your awesome winning poem in Susan's contest.. take care.. PD
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Date: 2/19/2013 3:48:00 PM
Did they have to pay for an extra guest in the room? Just kidding, Ilene! Wow! Very nice. Cheers, Roy
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Date: 2/12/2013 9:48:00 AM
Wow! That must have been an expirence that they will never forget. From now on if I go anywhere - I'll check under the bed. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla
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Date: 2/10/2013 11:05:00 PM
I love your retelling of this true story. I can imagine it from all the CSI shows I watch. haha. Good one.
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Date: 2/9/2013 8:41:00 PM
Oh, my gosh. What a crazy true story. Made me have goosebumps. Awful! Great write, Ilene!
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Date: 2/9/2013 7:49:00 PM
The maids must not have cleaned too good if they didn't check under the bed! If I found that kind of surprise in a hotel room I'd be reluctant to stay in one again. You are right - it's creepy! Your poem, however, is great! Love, Kim
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