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If I Go First

If I go first and you remain At Jesus' feet I'll wait for thee I'll wait for you on this high plane If I go first and you remain I'll watch for you soon to attain A Christ like body and be free If I go first and you remain At Jesus' feet I'll wait for thee Is this anywhere near Iambic Tetramenter?

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/13/2013 11:33:00 PM

SAra, I can't quite recall what that meter is right now, but if it is what I am thinking, you are very close to it, as Isaiah down here says. Good job.

Jack Horne

Date: 2/13/2013 8:18:00 AM

what a sweet write for Tommy, my friend

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 2/12/2013 10:10:00 AM

To answer your question, Yes, you are close to iambic tetrameter. Line one is spot on, as well as lines 3, 4, 5, 7. "At the feet of Jesus I'll be" has the right number of syllables but is not iambic. You could substitute, "At Jesus' feet I'll wait for thee." Line six is seven syllables, beginning on a stressed, which can be easily fixed by adding an unstressed at the front, such as "A". I also suggest switching "soon to" to "to soon". Great poem of trust.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 2/11/2013 8:58:00 PM

Sara; this is beautiful and very heart felt. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

The Situation

Date: 2/11/2013 6:16:00 PM

If I go first and you remain. I would not trust to poetic frame. I'd polish up and give a name. Give to grief a welcome pain.

Kimmy Thieleke

Date: 2/11/2013 1:00:00 PM

Beautiful .. perfect ma'am. hello and thank you so much for your comment i am honored.

Russell Sivey

Date: 2/11/2013 12:49:00 PM

This is just beautiful, a glorious Triolet, done very well! I enjoyed reading this tremendous write this afternoon! What a masterful piece, Great Work!!