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If I Can'T Die While Making Love

If I can’t die while making love I want my last breath taken in the hot tub If I can’t pass on in love’s embrace I want to meet my maker with steam on my face If I can’t perish with you on top I want the hot water bubbling when my heart stops If I can’t kick the bucket while fool’n around I want the Jacuzzi humming to be my last sound

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Ralph Sergi

Date: 1/14/2014 2:41:00 PM

Hi Joe: Thanks for the comment on La Muerta. Maybe I'd rather go in a hot tub.

Pam Woolford

Date: 12/29/2013 12:44:00 AM

What a great way to go in a Jacuzzi.. Another good write Joe Please feel free to visit me some time. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and wish you all the best for 2014. Pam x

Kathryn Collins

Date: 12/24/2013 12:43:00 PM

You are incorrigible Mr. Flach. I'm dropping dead into a empty hot fudge sundae dish. Happy Christmas (right?) love, Kathy

Ralph Sergi

Date: 12/19/2013 11:42:00 AM

Hi Joe: So a jacuzzi is your second love. great write. I also enjoyed the Ann Landers poem. There's nothing like your first love, despite Ann Landers' advice

Poet. Undertaker

Date: 12/18/2013 10:57:00 PM

By saying "perish with you on top" you mean one should kill the thirst.Also you would never compromise on this issue. Its great Joe.Who could question our policy? I really appreciate your daring.Great write.(: ) Jenish.

David Fisher

Date: 12/18/2013 7:39:00 PM

There's good logic and humor in your poem for sure. Either way you go, you win.

Chuck Melugin

Date: 12/18/2013 7:37:00 PM

U want a smile on your face eh mate?. good Write! chuck

Chris Boskovski

Date: 12/18/2013 2:35:00 PM

WOW!!! John my goodness what a poem! Very cleverly written my friend. I am glad I stopped by to discover your work! A very brilliant written piece you have here. you can guarantee that I will be back to read some more! Feel free to come pay me a visit anytime! Until the next comment on the next poem my friend! Great write.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/17/2013 4:00:00 PM

hahaha, so now I know what is first place for your favorite things and what takes second. I like food and movies, sex is a bit behind them. hahaha.