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Holding Hands

Light,weightless feelings Spongy thoughts floating Soaring like dry sea weed,jacaranda seed Sick Thoughts of you Something Something that wants to get out Emotions,warmth Listening. To your call I follow Coz love,loves breaks Love squeezes past barriers Dreams,thoughts Remind me of past love Future love. love that could be. But flowers have Lights have dimmed Lights that shone If lights really shone May a light shine A sunrise Orange and red Shimmering water Sand below my feet I touch you. My ever green vine On which love grows. Let’s roll,let’s skip Let’s greet the sun With a splash of salty water Silence Deep. Deep slumber At the earth’s beginning.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 11/12/2011 7:33:00 PM
There is something about this poem that attracts the attention of readers. Good flow and clever use of metaphors is some of its qualities. Thanks for sharing. -Mohammad
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Date: 12/2/2008 8:47:00 AM
Thank you all for the comments, appreciated.
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Date: 12/2/2008 5:46:00 AM
The poem surges ahead and sweeps the reader along. The ending is intriguing. It's one of those poems that calls you back for more than one reading.
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Date: 12/1/2008 5:18:00 PM
I enjoyed this very much my new poetry friend. The flow is done so well and the theme runs throughout the piece never losing a step. Thank you for your comments on my work today. Chris.
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Date: 12/1/2008 1:58:00 PM
I like this very much. Seems be some very clever use of evolution in both the development of the poem and in the metaphor of its content. Great stuff. Love, Nigel
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Date: 12/1/2008 10:26:00 AM
Nicely flows. Interesting. Easy to follow...
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