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His Eyes

His eyes, oh his eyes Consume the fabric of my life; I try to swim But he reels me in And I drown in those deep dark pools. I fall willingly Into the terrifying tenderness of love. I am lost - How could I have known I would fall so deep? First attempt doing free verse.

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Tobey Hill

Date: 11/7/2013 1:59:00 PM

I hope all is well. I truly miss reading your works, as you were one of my favorite poets. I do hope that you grace us with your presence once again...TAH

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/24/2012 8:24:00 PM

Liz, Once again, we find ourselves trapped in the Holiday Season. And, hear I am stopping by to say Hi and to wish you a Merry Christmas once again sincerely from my heart. Loving each moment I found comforting here on the soup. Thank you for any comment or support you have offered now or in the past. Love always & forever ~ PD

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/14/2012 2:33:00 PM

you wrote this while i was away, glad i've read this, i can understand this, i've found in life to give any aspect 100% effort, if one gets it right Bliss, if wrong devastation, but that's me.. thanks for the comment on 'The Leaving' i'm actually living back in the uk now, after a total of 45 years 36 of those in New Zealand and 9 in Australia...

Apoorva Patrikar

Date: 9/12/2012 6:22:00 AM

i like all ur stuff elizabeth! excellent work

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/14/2012 8:44:00 PM

" Into the terrifying tenderness of love...", yes Elizabeth,love and trust can translate into vulnerability,but its better than no love, right? With respect, J.A.B. %

Emmanuel Brian Oule

Date: 8/14/2012 8:27:00 AM

he eyes are hazel, and don't lie behind his eyes, they glow, just letting me into the love zone, his eyes are like aroma Liz i loved your poem, was just interpolating some more words from me, i love it, my eyes too, i love them

Terry O'Leary

Date: 7/23/2012 12:16:00 PM

Wonderful... I love 'eyes' poems... This one is very, very nice (exceptional as a 'first attempt')

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/10/2012 1:14:00 PM

Have you ever read Tanneheuser by Heinrich Heine - the German poet? The theme is similar to what this poem is about. Very nice, romantic work! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/1/2012 6:33:00 PM

Did you ever hear of the poem by W.H. Auden entitled "What is this thing called Love?" This reminds me of it. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Doreen Wright

Date: 6/29/2012 9:36:00 PM

Eyes...the windows to the soul. Great poem!

Terry O'Leary

Date: 6/22/2012 5:43:00 AM

Very nice...'Eyes' are always a good theme (for me anyway... apparently also for you)... I've not tried 'free verse', but maybe (with this inspiring poem in mind), I may one day try... Terry

Timothy Brumley

Date: 6/21/2012 6:40:00 AM

Yep! Been there, done that, and have the scars to prove it. Beautifully penned and wonderfully conveyed. Another masterpiece for your portfolio.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 6/19/2012 8:54:00 PM

Looks like you've mastered 'free verse' , Elizabeth! "the terrifying tenderness of love"...somewhat of a paradox, but so very true! Oopsie, I commented on this one before!...I enjoyed it as much this time 'round! Keep well..love, Mikki

Judy Ball

Date: 6/16/2012 8:42:00 AM

WoW! This is excellent. So full of emotion and such tenderness. Great stuff. God Bless, JB

Honestly J.T.

Date: 6/16/2012 12:36:00 AM

Love has a tendency to show up unannounced. I like this one. - JH

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/15/2012 1:44:00 AM

A very beautiful write and I woud have never guessed this is your first attempt. I think you have the Midas touch with poetry and it doesn't matter the form you use, it comes out golden!

Matthew Anish

Date: 6/12/2012 7:46:00 PM

A touching poem -very romantic. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/12/2012 11:15:00 AM

Very creative one, nicely penned. Loved and enjoyed, always bl

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 6/12/2012 12:24:00 AM

Beautiful verse! It captivated me..in a sea of perfect words. I can relate to this awesom poem. Great one. Always, Laura

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 6/11/2012 8:44:00 AM

you got mail!

Funom Makama

Date: 6/11/2012 5:58:00 AM

This is great... I really enjoyed it. Nice to get such a blessing in such a beautiful monday afternoon.

Francine Roberts

Date: 6/10/2012 11:13:00 PM

it is a beautiful first attempt at free verse Elizabeth, reading your book at work today was my inspiration for my sonnet, and that in turn was the inspiration for my current contest, see, you inspire me in many ways.

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/10/2012 7:18:00 PM

gotta watch out for the power of the eyes! Like youve done free verse all your life and maybe you have.. nice job of it Lizzie

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/10/2012 2:41:00 PM

You need not worry bout my mind set. Rest assured, me? You do get. The value of the year we've spent. Truly has been heaven sent. :)

Elizabeth Wesley
Date: 6/10/2012 7:32:00 PM

I agree Robert, it has been that way for me too. Hope it never changes!:)

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 6/10/2012 2:35:00 PM

Very intense and riveting is this one;makes me feel to get busy writing some more myself..!