He Dreams Despite My Screams

If only he could discern my pain
and feel it's sorrow near
if only he could smell the rain
of salty tears I smear

If by chance his sorrow grew
Ivy's green disguise
and choked the life he held onto
then would he realize

Don't forsake me where I may transcend
beget me to dissolve 
I pray most humbly to ascend
if my sin you won't absolve

If he would only to forsee
these eyes so trite and stark
the truth is he does suffer me
and leaves me with the dark
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008


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Date: 10/13/2020 5:38:00 PM
This has an eerie feel to it. Very effective. ;0)
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Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/14/2020 8:54:00 AM
Thanks for reading, Richard. I really appreciate it :)
Date: 7/24/2008 8:42:00 AM
You judge yourself a little harsher than you think. You write well and have a good heart. You can't ask for more than that in a person. Keep writing. Vince
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Date: 7/16/2008 8:46:00 AM
So beautifully penned with heart-wrenching and poignant emotion. You know what-I love you, too.:) LOL. Anyway, I didn't log in here in a few days, because I was very busy lately. I hope all is well with you. Love, Sara
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Date: 7/14/2008 2:40:00 PM
This is very good. Lovely flow and rhythm and so very touching. Very well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 7/14/2008 12:54:00 PM
Ivy, your writing is always so poignant and presents itself with a clarity, by way of great imagery. This is a wonderfully flowing read but for a sad subject. You pen your words with style. Michael
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Date: 7/14/2008 12:24:00 PM
Nice intertwining of nature and emotion to forward your thoughts in this poem. In answer to your earlier question, I do go lilies--perennials I bought as small plants. Thank you for your ongoing support and for sharing your talent with us. Best wishes. Karen
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Date: 7/13/2008 8:45:00 PM
Now - who are you talking about? A powerful poem written out of pain. The pain comes through especially in the last stanza. Keep it up!
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Date: 7/13/2008 12:17:00 PM
Astrid - This poem has excellent rhyme and flow - the message is very sad and profound - I thank you for your kind comments and wish you many blessings
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Date: 7/13/2008 7:28:00 AM
Sad write, but true for so many...Excellent poem, Always, Christy
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