Hail Mary

she steals money 
from the church collecting box - - 
Hail Mary

for Susan’s Senryu contest

lifesenryu

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Audrey Haick

Date: 3/17/2013 1:18:00 PM

Poor Mary...LOL..I'm sure she must really need it! Great Senryu, Jack. Just spending a little time here today and I'm already enjoying your poems, my friend. x Annalise

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/5/2012 5:38:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Black Eyed Susan's "Single Senryu contest Jack. Love, Carol

Tahera Mannan

Date: 10/2/2012 10:38:00 PM

Lovely Jack, many congrats for this win.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 10/2/2012 3:52:00 PM

Mary is in deeep doo doo! hahaha...Congrats, Jack! Very smooooooth writing!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/2/2012 1:16:00 PM

JACK, Congratulations with your awesome win in Susan's "Single Senryu" contest. always, PD

Joyce Johnson

Date: 10/2/2012 12:39:00 PM

A shocker and great example of senryu. Congratulations on another winner, Jack.Love, Joyce

Kash Poet

Date: 10/2/2012 6:35:00 AM

Jack,Congrats on your top win with this great senryu!!

Apoorva Patrikar

Date: 10/1/2012 10:37:00 PM

congratulations :) well done!!!

Lee Ramage

Date: 10/1/2012 9:11:00 PM

well done, congratulations on your win. Always enjoy your poetry Jack. Lee

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 10/1/2012 8:16:00 PM

lovely write!! congratulations friend Jack!! cheers! **Maria**

Joann Grisetti

Date: 10/1/2012 5:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your win.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/1/2012 4:45:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2012 2:13:00 PM

wow, GREAT win for you, my friend. Congratulations. (I always loved this one)

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/1/2012 1:44:00 PM

Great job Jack!...this one is a real poser...I see several meanings here...guess that's what makes it good, huh? - Tim

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/1/2012 1:20:00 PM

excellent jack! you do not need the --which indicates a kireji or verbal caesura (cutting word), leading to a juxtaposed phrase which is not used in senryu [and is not actually there in your write ;), your content is excellent and has the necessary cynical and darkly humerous tone perfectly so proud to share the spot with YOU! Light & Love

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 10/1/2012 1:11:00 PM

Brilliant Jack congratulations xx

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/25/2012 7:00:00 AM

oh that is low....maybe she needs it ??? LOL

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/24/2012 9:54:00 AM

Hola, my friend Jack how are you today? and about your senryu.. wow.. hail who goes there. LOL... I hope her conscious speaks louder than her needs.. love it..pd

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/24/2012 8:48:00 AM

oh this is clever jack, one has to really ponder on this... awesome...

Constance La France

Date: 9/23/2012 5:04:00 PM

Hi Jack, fun senryu for the contest, I must admit I expected a faith poem, ha ha... best of luck in the contest. I am feeling okay, not perfect, but improving each day. Thanks for all your comments on my poetry. Love Constance

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/23/2012 2:56:00 PM

what a splendid way to end this senryu, jack... well paced and definitely full of impact!...wow! :) huggs!

Joann Grisetti

Date: 9/22/2012 5:38:00 PM

A very moving senryu. Poor woman.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/22/2012 4:21:00 PM

Reads like a winner..I like the play on words..Good luck in the contest...Thanks for stopping by..I put butter on the pill but I had looked it up on the internet..Wrote a blog about it..The butter did the trick..I don't know if it will work again or not but I hope so for that will make pill day much easier..Sara

Gwendolen Song

Date: 9/22/2012 3:14:00 PM

Shame on Mary....she will be doomed to hail...Jack, u wrote another wonder!!! FAbs!! gwendolen