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Haiku/Limerick Number Twenty

Haiku master, with me had a word Said my Haiku's are simply absurd Just one more for today, then put them away You'r the mistress, I'm the Master, preferred Haiku Mountain air biting Spring lambs trailing on the edge Mint sauce with dinner

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/10/2009 9:45:00 AM

I love the way your poem speaks of "lambs trailing on the edge" and then they become dinner. The haiku master controls your pen! Love, Carolyn

Brian Strand

Date: 2/12/2009 12:33:00 AM

Excellent haiku Deirdre has a Shiki quality about it.One for my favourites.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Date: 2/5/2009 12:41:00 PM

Interesting prelude to this poem. I like the unique imagery in your haiku. Nice use of this concise form. Keep up the good writing. Karen

Raul Moreno

Date: 2/4/2009 3:19:00 AM

Nice work. Both are filled with insight. I don't think your haiku's are absurd. I love the imagery in your work...Raul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 2/3/2009 7:00:00 PM

Good job..this is very different and I like it..lamb..I love it ..sorry my fluffy friends. BG

Sean Kelly

Date: 2/3/2009 1:07:00 PM

Very unusual combo , Deirdre and most original .... Now what's for dessert ???

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/3/2009 12:52:00 PM

ha ha very clever. The last or slowest lamb will surely be caught and made into dinner. mmmm I love lamb, am I invited? Excellent form and perfect clarity. Michael