Haiku 4

shallow puddles dot the battered sidewalk-- water ripples

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Painted Hunter

Date: 4/23/2013 9:03:00 AM

Like one I had a week or so...frankenstein came over to my house to play with my kids...and I let him. But he was playing too rough(imagine that) and I had to put him out. He threw a fit in my yard after I scolded him, and choked my neighbor to death. Heck, I don't even have neighbors...haha.

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/23/2013 8:59:00 AM

I'll bet Taiwan is awesome to see. And get ready for another wild ride if jasmine tea affects you like it does me. I'm not sure if I want to drink anymore. The dreams aren't always pleasant for me.

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 3/12/2013 12:26:00 PM

This is really good for number four! You have created an image that feeds the imagination, so that each person fills in the rest of the picture in their own way.

David Williams

Date: 3/7/2013 3:12:00 AM

Heather good image....David

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/6/2013 4:40:00 PM

amazing, Heather this is, one can indeed create a mind full of imagery here.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/6/2013 2:41:00 PM

Fantastic imagery!! Keep those haiku coming, sweetie. I am happy just to find time to get to the poets who have commented to me. I need to double the hours in every day!!

Debra Squyres

Date: 3/6/2013 2:05:00 PM

Love this image !!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/5/2013 8:49:00 PM

awe Heather, I love rain, I love the haiku. I'm picturing my feet dipping in the shallow puddles. this is some good splashing fun, if you like this imagery... enjoyed~ LINDA

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/5/2013 5:25:00 AM

Good morning Heather, you inspired me to write a poem this morning. Have a wonderful day.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/5/2013 4:27:00 AM

Good morning beautiful friend...'dot the battered sidewalk'...Nice way to start the day and why do I feel like writing a haiku all of a sudden?....Hummm, let's see here, there's gotta...