Haiku 10

brooding clouds suffocate the sunset-- lightning flickers

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Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/8/2013 10:14:00 AM

A very nice haiku Heather... Well done ~A.O

Jeremy Martin

Date: 4/28/2013 1:47:00 PM

Ominous but lush little haiku, Heather. I really like the contrast between the brooding clouds (which I see as slow and looming) and the swift camera flash of the lighting.

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/25/2013 7:24:00 AM

Is that the flicker of lightning...or the flicker of haiku ninja's blade?...;)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/24/2013 9:19:00 PM

Heather...you are amazing! Lovely haiku!

Donna Jones

Date: 4/24/2013 7:13:00 PM

Me too.....another great one

Donna Jones
Date: 4/24/2013 7:14:00 PM

Ditto Andrea that is...about being on my favorite list

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2013 3:15:00 PM

what great imagery this has, Heather. I love when you remind me why I have you on my fave poets' list.

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 4/24/2013 2:22:00 PM

Well, it looks like I will have to be the first person to comment on this haiku. I wonder if people will copy my words or say the same thing. Your picture here is bigger than life. A powerful thunderstorm threatens. I like this poem and the picture it evokes. It is rather hard for me to identify the feeling that went into this poem, but I can definitely sense feeling. I think that is what makes haiku good.