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Footprints On Her Back

She held them tightly trying not to cry out with the pain as the door opened. A large woman bearing an almost visible authoritarian streak exploded through the door filling the white sterile looking room with her presence. In a deep manly voice that matched her size, she told them the time was over. They had to go… The children cried as she placed her hand on their shoulders and pulled at them with as much compassion as one swatting a fly or stamping on a snail leaving its silver trail over an immaculate looking flower border. joined with old bruises footprints on her naked back… two children still cry The cries lingered in the corridor as the doctor showed the plain clothed policewoman into the secure white room. The photographer followed carrying equipment strapped to his body like a solider in full battledress. Pictures were taken of the once slim beautiful, now battered girl who had two beautiful children that were now in care while she was paraded before strangers with a camera before the healing could start from the stamping given as a parting gift by her new ex boyfriend. © ~GG~ 23/01/2013 Competition Entry: Mixing it up

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Date: 2/10/2013 2:32:00 PM
Very emotive work for the contest entry..Congrats on your win.Sara
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Date: 2/7/2013 10:49:00 AM
Mandy, Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD
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Date: 2/6/2013 11:24:00 AM
Your treatment of this heartbreaking story was tender. Compasion felt throughout. Your haiku, so cleverly written fits in well. Congrats on your winning spot !!
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Date: 2/6/2013 4:46:00 AM
another winner from your wonderful pen, Golden Girl...a fav of mine...
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Date: 2/5/2013 11:42:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in this interesting contest,great pal.Nice to read your haibun...XOXO....
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Date: 2/5/2013 8:35:00 PM
well done Mandy.....Seren
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Date: 2/5/2013 7:49:00 PM
powerful write Mandy...congrats on your win
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Date: 2/5/2013 6:58:00 PM
You go Goldie, great job with almost an impossible subject to do in a haiku! Congrad's on your win Light & Love
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Date: 2/6/2013 3:59:00 AM
Ha you should have told me it was a winter one lol, thanks Debs xx
Date: 2/5/2013 6:36:00 PM
Congrats Mandy on your well deserved win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 2/5/2013 4:43:00 PM
Sad tale very effectively told! Congrats on win.
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Date: 1/23/2013 4:37:00 PM
wow, this one is intense. A sad one but I really enjoyed this entry!!
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Date: 1/23/2013 2:55:00 PM
soup mail Light & Love
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Date: 1/23/2013 8:25:00 AM
Mandy thumbs up on this one hun.....Seren
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Date: 1/23/2013 3:54:00 AM
Bloody hell Mandy this is so profound, with such awesome visual attributes that flow from every pensive word.. yet the story the poetry told is amazing...
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