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Finding God

He turns away from me to say goodbye Quivering not, I felt a pinch...so damn alone While the night raven screeches up high As crystal tears bleed of why, down the bones. Somehow, a dove climbs on my lap, to show How the moon rises as new flowers glide; While Heaven awaits starlight's afterglow Enshrining this moment where peace abides. ............................. Gail Doyle's Finding God Contest 8/7/2014

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/15/2014 9:23:00 AM

A very wonderful write and win! Regards, Teddy.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/14/2014 10:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your win and I love your poem. God bless you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/13/2014 7:40:00 AM

Indeed this a wonderful write in Finding God..your two first stanza my fave..:) yet as always as each pen you have is new and the images are wow!!!KUDOS!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/13/2014 5:53:00 AM

Wow Nette an extremely mesmerising write, congrats on first place win!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/13/2014 1:15:00 AM

Congrats on a great win, Nette. A brilliant write

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/12/2014 9:08:00 PM

Congrats on a huge win. A wonderful write it is!!

John Lawless

Date: 8/12/2014 6:06:00 PM

Way to go Nette, great job, well deserved win.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/12/2014 12:04:00 PM

- Nette,congratulations on winning poem in: "Finding God" - Contest - Sponsored by: Gail Angel Doyle - Skillfully rhyme and beautifully written (you are always my number one :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/12/2014 11:33:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sidney Beck

Date: 8/12/2014 11:29:00 AM

ABSOLUTE RUBBISH ! ! ................................ ............................................ best wishes and congrats......... K of C

Bl Devnath

Date: 8/10/2014 11:54:00 AM

Pain and sorrow succumbs to uncertainty but there's way to God in which peace abides enshrining the sweet moments of life. Nicely done my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Len Gasun

Date: 8/10/2014 11:37:00 AM

A very beautiful & great inspirational poem this is my very dear friend Nette. I love it so much. Finding our loving God is really enshrining in this stellar piece of yours. Thank u so much for sharing! Biggest hugs to u from me! Thank u so much as well for sharing your precious time to read and comment on one of my latest posted poems. God bless u and your loved ones. I miss you too! i love u. tc always. Love lots and many hugs, Leonora

Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/10/2014 8:37:00 AM

Wow! One beautiful, peaceful, perfect moment.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/7/2014 5:45:00 PM

Where peace abides is a wonderful place..Enjoyed reading your work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/7/2014 4:15:00 PM

I was warmly immersed in this poem. You enshrine'd it very well. Love that last one about the dove on your lap; they are friendly creatures, indeed.

Manny Paras

Date: 8/7/2014 1:38:00 PM

Woman, you just changed me into a saint with this majestic poem! From raven to dove; that's mighty transformational. Take a bow!

Carly Lalion

Date: 8/7/2014 11:40:00 AM

Now this is a piece of poetry that grabs me deeply. I like how you express your thoughts with great metaphors, " breaths endure the sting." How profound and inspirational, Nette.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/7/2014 9:48:00 AM

Imagery is sublime Nette - one day I hope to be able to write as creatively and beautifully as this:-) I particularly love the 4th stanza. Hugs Jan xxx

John Freeman

Date: 8/7/2014 8:31:00 AM

Good to see and hear your beautiful grace in words Nette. three beautiful words... in the last stanza...three good Omens... Dove, Moon, Peace... Dove the symbol of the peace it brings.. peace in the joy of just being....As sure as the moon rises like a new flower guides a new day or way. And of course Love enshrines it all in life. Agape, Moses

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/7/2014 7:35:00 AM

I love the third stanza the best, it really came to life in my mind, oh girl you have such a good way with words! :)