Falling Into Darkness

Suddenly, he found himself floating through the air.
He saw no light and heard no sound, just darkness everywhere.
Trying to remember the place where he had been.
Although he wasn’t sure it seemed to him that he had sinned.

He had committed many crimes in just his few short years.
And been the cause of heartaches and many, many tears.
Guilty of offenses, he even had lost count.
Soon the man would have to face his sins and take account.

The man was given chances all throughout his life.
Lucky to find love, even he had a wife. 
But soon he had destroyed their love and she was gone as well.
Plunging the man further into evil, where he fell.

Then the total darkness started turning bright.
He felt that he was being pulled into a warmer light.
That’s when he remembered the scene that had occurred.
Although it wasn’t very clear, just pieces that were blurred.

Again, he had been caught in sin but this time he would pay.
For all the lives he’d taken, this was to be his day.
There was no place for him to hide no place he could run to.
And as he felt the fires burn that was the time he knew.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 4/8/2012 5:22:00 AM
Hey Rockman, Thank you so much for your comment and your advice. It is much appreciated and I agree with it. I am going to change it to 'even he' as that would sound much better. Thank you Rockman! :)
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Date: 4/7/2012 11:48:00 PM
Here we have another good poem. However, this one seems to have a few glitches. I've never been a fan of centering the poem. It leaves the reader to determine the rhythym. I prefer the ABAB as opposed to the AABB. But that's just me. If I were to change anything, it would be "he even" to "even he" in the third line of the second stanza. Other than that, "Well done". Rockman
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Date: 4/7/2012 5:14:00 AM
Hello Fabiyas, Thank you very much. :)
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Date: 4/7/2012 12:12:00 AM
Fall in darkness is realistically presented,Samia
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