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Eyes Smoldering

Drunk, and his eyes smoldering,
and that’s what she hated,
drinking and he became a monster alcohol created,
he rammed into her,
a string of spit,
after the hit,
stretched across his mouth,
then he struck her again,
he was a total disgrace,
backhanded her across the face,
she felt his rage and heat,
her knees buckled,
but somehow she managed to stay on her feet,
he sensed her fear,
as he grabbed her hair,
pulled her down,
ignored the sounds
as she hit the ground,
his fist pulled back,
and on with his attack,
he struck her again and again,
and once more,
as her blood stained the floor,
her mouth swollen and bleeding,
as he ignored the pleading,
she was his wife,
but she had no more strength
to plead for her life.

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  1. Date: 12/28/2009 4:44:00 PM
    I am left wondering "Whose eyes were smouldering?" A sad sight to see, a horrid happening and what should be done is always the eternal question? Light & Love (PS a good self defense course helps alot)

  1. Date: 4/13/2009 7:36:00 PM
    The violence in this poem was frightened, but very vividly written. How sad it is that so many people endure relationships like this! Powerful writing - felt like I was watching "Burning Bed" or another movie on domestic violence. Excellent work, Frank!

  1. Date: 4/13/2009 11:11:00 AM
    Frank, excellent narration of a too-often horror, jmg

  1. Date: 4/13/2009 7:44:00 AM
    Thanks for all the read Frankie boyeeee..loved it.

  1. Date: 4/11/2009 5:23:00 PM
    The greatness of this poem is that you don't need to make any statement against men abusing women, you don't need to explain it, you don't need long-winded lines nor to talk about wrongdoing, trasgression, crime, behavior, or misconduct. You don't need big words nor overused adjectives...You just paint a moment, a small sequence of seconds, but you does it in a way that our heart, spirit, and mind fill with repugnance, abomination, and censure against these acts. A great poem, Frank. Ruben.

  1. Date: 4/10/2009 12:00:00 PM
    i fear the day i run into this guy but the imagery you put in my head was amazing a bit brutal still it was good

  1. Date: 4/10/2009 10:07:00 AM
    I read this against the background of one the write left behind by one of our female poet ... and it brings back the anger I feel against men abusing woman ... when God made us to protect them ... our family, and all the earth ... we must not believe any more that women are our counterpart, but that they are our complement. Thanks for the exposure.

  1. Date: 4/10/2009 9:10:00 AM
    He probably served a month and 2 days, maybe even with working privledges cause God forbid he lose his job.

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 1:01:00 PM
    ow my,i can nearly feel it!horrible experience ,a reality,he definitely needs help.being alchaholic is a sickness which no one can cure without help,she needs more help,she needs her superhero to save her;-),im jokin now! but it is unacceptable for women or men who experience this humiliation,there are people who arent being punched still they get hurt form husb. or wife or from others in other ways,words ,manipulation,selfishness etc can kill!great poetry from a great poet as usual!

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 8:53:00 AM
    Hard words to read, especially when you know its a reality for far too many. :( This makes my heart hurt, Frank. Love Christie

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 8:27:00 AM
    This was like watching it...too painful, and too real.....but so well Christopher said...makes one cringe....but that's what a good writer can do.

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 7:15:00 AM
    This is a well written sad fact for many a woman. It is sad for the man in this write as well as he has been consumed by alcoholism and anger. Great writing. Smiles from Lolita

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 7:13:00 AM
    This is raw my friend..I cringed a few times..especially with the hitting....