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Dusk

the sky is like a canvas
splashed with modern art
multi coloured daubs of clouds
streaks of blue apart
a reddish splodge sun
slowly slides towards the edge
and dusk has begun

Jack Horne, 29th September, for Nette’s WONDER OF DUSK IN SEGUIDILLA contest

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Victoria Anderson-Throop Date: 11/11/2012 3:00:00 AM My favorite time of day.... Imaginative word choice. Visual and visceral. You should have been up with the winners...but then I have always been an odd duck...never agree with consensus! Thanks for letting the rest of us enjoy! Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 10/9/2012 12:18:00 PM Well jack I feel this should have been placed in the contest.A beauty from you! Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 10/5/2012 4:49:00 AM Jack, Your poetry is always so diverse. I enjoyed this entry that should do well in the contest. I have to mention how impressed I was when I read your page in the "Snippets Anthology" I just received today. I loved both your poems, in fact they may be my two favorite in the entire book! It was such a pleasure to recognise so many names in the book. You have such great talent. Cheers! Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 10/4/2012 3:37:00 PM This is lovely Jack, almost an opposite, impression, usually it the sky on the canvas, you've done it the other way round, awesome to read this poem, like you have written it..... Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 10/4/2012 7:36:00 AM VIVIDLY WRITTEN WITH IMPRESSIVE LINES DEPICTING DUSK .. WINNING WISHES jACK LUV .. Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 10/4/2012 6:53:00 AM what in the world is seguidilla I will have to look that one up....I am getting an education today. beautiful poetry today! Thanks for taking me on the sunset stroll! lol Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/1/2012 4:24:00 PM yours is wonderfully descriptive, Jack. I've been here almost 3 hours and still can't finish. haha. what is splodge ? that one is new word for me. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 10/1/2012 2:46:00 PM Jack, this is lovely. Good luck in the contest, hoping it will win. oxox love Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Joann Grisetti Date: 9/30/2012 6:07:00 PM Remarkable use of words inthis new form. Nette should love it as well. Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 9/29/2012 4:29:00 PM What a spectacular write my friend! I thoroughly enjoyed every speck of sunlight you gave through this poem! The imagery you gave me were spot on for a great description of dusk! Fabulous piece, Awesome Work!! Login to Reply

Terry O'Leary Date: 9/29/2012 2:00:00 PM Very nice imagery! Good luck in the contest... Terry Login to Reply

Jack Ellison Date: 9/29/2012 1:44:00 PM A great write my friend! Had to look up "splodge" though! LOL Cheers, Jack Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/29/2012 1:25:00 PM Very expressive and descriptive work..I could just see that painting..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..That canvas of modern art is definitely geometrical design with rainbow colors...Thanks for dropping by..Sara Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 9/29/2012 1:00:00 PM Jack, a very nice picture you have painted here, I love the idea of dusk being depicted as modern art, well done and good luck, I am slowly (very slowly) getting back into things, and I would like to thank you dearly for the card from you and Susan it meant a lot to me, take care my friend...David Login to Reply