Dusk

the sky is like a canvas splashed with modern art multi coloured daubs of clouds streaks of blue apart a reddish splodge sun slowly slides towards the edge and dusk has begun Jack Horne, 29th September, for Nette’s WONDER OF DUSK IN SEGUIDILLA contest

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Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 11/11/2012 3:00:00 AM

My favorite time of day.... Imaginative word choice. Visual and visceral. You should have been up with the winners...but then I have always been an odd duck...never agree with consensus! Thanks for letting the rest of us enjoy!

Kash Poet

Date: 10/9/2012 12:18:00 PM

Well jack I feel this should have been placed in the contest.A beauty from you!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/5/2012 4:49:00 AM

Jack, Your poetry is always so diverse. I enjoyed this entry that should do well in the contest. I have to mention how impressed I was when I read your page in the "Snippets Anthology" I just received today. I loved both your poems, in fact they may be my two favorite in the entire book! It was such a pleasure to recognise so many names in the book. You have such great talent. Cheers!

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/4/2012 3:37:00 PM

This is lovely Jack, almost an opposite, impression, usually it the sky on the canvas, you've done it the other way round, awesome to read this poem, like you have written it.....

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/4/2012 7:36:00 AM

VIVIDLY WRITTEN WITH IMPRESSIVE LINES DEPICTING DUSK .. WINNING WISHES jACK LUV ..

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/4/2012 6:53:00 AM

what in the world is seguidilla I will have to look that one up....I am getting an education today. beautiful poetry today! Thanks for taking me on the sunset stroll! lol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2012 4:24:00 PM

yours is wonderfully descriptive, Jack. I've been here almost 3 hours and still can't finish. haha. what is splodge ? that one is new word for me.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/1/2012 2:46:00 PM

Jack, this is lovely. Good luck in the contest, hoping it will win. oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Joann Grisetti

Date: 9/30/2012 6:07:00 PM

Remarkable use of words inthis new form. Nette should love it as well.

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/29/2012 4:29:00 PM

What a spectacular write my friend! I thoroughly enjoyed every speck of sunlight you gave through this poem! The imagery you gave me were spot on for a great description of dusk! Fabulous piece, Awesome Work!!

Terry O'Leary

Date: 9/29/2012 2:00:00 PM

Very nice imagery! Good luck in the contest... Terry

Jack Ellison

Date: 9/29/2012 1:44:00 PM

A great write my friend! Had to look up "splodge" though! LOL Cheers, Jack

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/29/2012 1:25:00 PM

Very expressive and descriptive work..I could just see that painting..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..That canvas of modern art is definitely geometrical design with rainbow colors...Thanks for dropping by..Sara

David Williams

Date: 9/29/2012 1:00:00 PM

Jack, a very nice picture you have painted here, I love the idea of dusk being depicted as modern art, well done and good luck, I am slowly (very slowly) getting back into things, and I would like to thank you dearly for the card from you and Susan it meant a lot to me, take care my friend...David