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Dreaming of Legos Monotetra

Using Jared Picketts form Monotetra
Dreamt I was a giant last night running through Lego City height. Smashing it to pieces with might. Such a good fight, such a good fight! At some point city became real. And the buildings' pain I could feel. Big giants standing on the hill. Punching to kill, punching to kill! Cleaving off huge chunks of red brick. Asphalt flying but could not stick! Smashing through walls with a swift kick. Wanting this lick, wanting this lick. It was as real or though it seems smashing through the walls of my dreams, trying to break free with loud screams. No justice deems, no justice deems! My prison walls are very real. Wish it would help me to appeal. My soul grows stagnant with no zeal. To God I kneel, to God I kneel! Though we live in different worlds on a Merry-go-round that twirls. See diff'rent views as life unfurls. Tears cold as pearls, tears cold as pearls....
Inspired by Jonathan Taylor and Jared Pickett...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/24/2012 8:01:00 PM
Great you are. Very nice.
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Date: 4/23/2012 5:47:00 AM
Thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry. It is always a pleasure to be able to read yours Marty. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/20/2012 10:52:00 PM
You know what Marty, I wish I had something bad to say that would be worthy of a critical remark, I do not.. WELL WRITTEN my friend!! I chose you to begin this trend because I knew that you would produce something great and you have exceeded my expectations.. WELL DONE.. Smooth flow, rhyme was on point and it read well.. I thoroughly enjoyed your interpretation, a new favorite!!:JP}
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Date: 4/20/2012 9:39:00 PM
A very interesting form you have showed us. jared really likes forms. It's his own? I enjoyed this one.
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Jared Pickett
Date: 8/6/2012 8:25:00 PM
No, I would like to take the credit for this form but I cannot.. I gained knowledge of this form through shadowpoetry.com.. I find most forms I write in from this site!!
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Jared Pickett
Date: 4/21/2012 11:59:00 AM
No, this is not of my creation.. I have written many though!!!
Date: 4/20/2012 3:11:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your creation...Sara
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