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Don'T Cry For Me

.      blank page   
   this           I write
On
             my              
         thoughts
      and prayers.
     Tabula Rasa,   
    I wish to be    
    reborn.Hear  
    me ancient
     One,and 
      know
       of

     
      my

      
      love
   
   
      for
 
    
      You...

   


I've kept my promise,
don't keep Your distance

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Joanna Smith Date: 2/16/2010 10:29:00 AM wow this is a very effective poem yoni i loved it the last line was perfect couldnt have been more suitable and pulled the poem together in the perfect ending, it was great i loved it i can relate to it. =)jo Login to Reply

Date: 12/26/2009 6:26:00 PM Glad I ran into this artistic poem again. It takes talent to write a piece this complete in presentation and word. Well done!! Thank you for your kind comments. Happy New Year! Karen Login to Reply

Jay Loveless Date: 11/3/2009 9:05:00 AM this strikes me in the heart.....to be reborn...spiritually i have been. for i too called out to the great ancient ones and..they heard me at last...believe it or not, though they are called by many names, they are truly one. as one is many, many is one. its just as they say with other things. the first will be the last and the last will be the first. etc etc. i hope they have heard your calling too. xo Raiin Login to Reply

Date: 9/4/2009 11:46:00 AM Definitely worth more than one read! Must have taken a lot of planning to present this so artistically. Just wanted to let you know the actual form of "Community Spirit" is a Brevette--three lines noun-verb-noun with the second line with a space between each of the letters. I asked the creator of this form for permission to post the information on it here at The Soup but never got a reply. Thank you for your kind comments. Have a great weekend! Karen Login to Reply

Cherica Eckiwaudah Date: 9/1/2009 4:28:00 PM Nice Write, Loved It, Always Cherica Lynn <3 Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 8/29/2009 8:31:00 PM I like the way John Freeman commented on this write ... an insight I would not have though of. Love the tear drop and there is great imagery to this write. Thanks for this one, Yoni !! Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 8/29/2009 4:20:00 AM recomment..Yon i left you an anwer about my poem..it was fiction though:)charma Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 8/28/2009 6:29:00 PM Tabula rasa (Latin: blank slate) refers to the epistemological thesis that individuals are born without built-in mental content and that their knowledge comes from experience and perception.Generally proponents of the tabula rasa thesis favor the "nurture" side of the nature versus nurture debate, when it comes to aspects of one's personality, social and emotional behavior and intelligence....This is only true IF one doesn't believe in reincarnation. Light & Love (Thanks for the new concept!) Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 8/27/2009 11:56:00 AM As usual Yoni as I focus on the content first and not the form,,,,,for poetry comes from the heart and in general reflect the inner thoughts,,,,,,I am pleased with what you have said! I understand what you mean" don't keep your distance",,,,,,,,,,there is no distance, between the now,,,,,,where God dwells,,,,,,,and time where we dwell,,,,,the now is the centermost part of our own being. The kingdom is within you. God bless, and may the connection become a consciousness one, Sincerely Moses Login to Reply

Date: 8/26/2009 4:51:00 PM Wonderful creative format for a fresh view. So artistic. Nice one! Karen Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/26/2009 2:15:00 PM Separation from God brings a giant tear. I hope the shed tear brings reunion. Keep writing. Sara Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 8/26/2009 11:45:00 AM I am so happy to be able to read your amazing poetry today Yoni. I thank you for sharing your writing. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 8/26/2009 11:24:00 AM Wow Yoni,i ve seen the photo of the crying woman.............wishing for rebirth..wishing for a different life---wishing your ancient one to hear your love ........keeping the promise.........that is sometihng very nice to keep to a promise......needing her touch.....excellent poem of love Yoni..and originally crafted,going to my favs--charma Login to Reply