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Dizzy With Love

I chanced upon a memory that seems like yesterday but it was really long ago and oh, so far away. It was a chilled November night and in my thirteenth year the stars were gathered in my eyes for the one I loved was there. We sat there talking quietly I, full of nervous doubt just trying to sound normal thinking that I might pass out. He was quite a few years older a friend that had been true I knew that he had won my heart and I hoped he felt it, too. My heart was beating way too loud through my words I stumbled and when he looked deep in my eyes oh, how my stomach tumbled! I thought that I would die right there he made my dreams come true he said the words I longed to hear he had felt the same way, too! He swept me quickly in his arms and claimed that first sweet kiss I never even had the chance to worry I would miss! There isn't much that I can say it flipped my head around and all the world was so devine as I floated off the ground. The time had come to say good night and he kissed me once more I said good night and turned around and crashed into a door! Inspired by John Hecks Egads, My First Kiss contest *I was trying to act all cool and collected, mature. I was so embarressed I wanted the ground to swallow me up! RG

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Date: 3/3/2009 9:15:00 PM
Beautiful piece and congrats in your placement...Raul
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Date: 2/27/2009 6:32:00 PM
Robin congratulations on placing in John's contest - Was the door hard, just kidding - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 2/27/2009 1:05:00 PM
That is pretty embarrassing; but a very cute poem. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 2/27/2009 9:43:00 AM
Oh, Robin, how well I know the way the "stomach tumbles" when you find a new love. This is a beautiful poem with quite a witty twist in the last line. Good luck in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/27/2009 8:27:00 AM
I laughed when I first read it...still making me smile, Robin! :)~ Congratulations once again! ~ Carrie
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Date: 2/27/2009 7:32:00 AM
YAY Robin! Congrats on your win in John's contest! Love, Shar
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Date: 2/27/2009 5:58:00 AM
There you go beating me out again LOL You go girl! PS I better start getting more particular comments from you to HELP me (poke). Light & Love Debbie
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Date: 2/26/2009 3:51:00 PM
This is sooo sweet! I know you will always remember this for how passionately it is written...awesome write!......love Maryam*
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Date: 2/24/2009 12:11:00 PM
wow-- emotions stirred wonderfully :)
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Date: 2/24/2009 6:15:00 AM
Sounds like he had you love bound, bound to do something crazy. I believe we've all crashed into a door or more.... Heck when I was 11 - 14 yrs. old I was so ornery my mom and dad put me in a Military School where we even had to march in formation to school and everywhere we went...Nice writing...great rhyme..Lawrence in Lou. Ky.
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Date: 2/23/2009 10:57:00 AM
Smile~"Hello Lovely & Precious Robin!!!"~What a wonderful account, of an intense, passionate and yet somewhat awkward moment, within a young ladies life~Smile~I hope that "You" are doing beautifully dear~and that everything is going perfectly for You wherever You are!!? A bit pressed for time-but I wanted to stop by to say hello to "Your Priceless Soul!!!"~ And, I truly loved Your write here dear~"Love & Warmth Always To 'You & Your Loves, John!!!"~"Have A Beautiful Day Precious Robin~Bye!":)
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Date: 2/23/2009 10:04:00 AM
But it's memories like that that make it even more special, too bad for the embarassment though. Love the read, however, this is wonderfully written. Michael
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Date: 2/22/2009 4:27:00 PM
nice memory to have forever Robin! Light & Love Debbie
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Date: 2/22/2009 10:33:00 AM
Good luck in the contest , QR . The first is always special ....
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Date: 2/22/2009 7:55:00 AM
Best wishes with this one Robin.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 2/22/2009 7:15:00 AM
~lol~ This is soooo awesome!!! You nailed it girlfriend. Good luck in the contest but i don't think you will need it! Enjoyed this so much. Love, Shar
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Date: 2/22/2009 7:14:00 AM
How cute is this!! Ouch....hope you didn't hurt your nose!! Reminds me of my time when I was older (about l6), when a boy dropped me off after school, and I slammed my hand in the door of his car getting out, ....I pretended all was fine, and waited till he drove away, then bawled because it hurt so bad!! (Oh that pride!! It is our enemy!) :) Good luck in the contest, Robin!! ~ love, Carrie
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Date: 2/22/2009 6:32:00 AM
well written, Robin! beautifully expressed.. so in love...! ~ Arany
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Date: 2/22/2009 6:32:00 AM
I got it from the song Robin.. I love that song too.
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Date: 2/22/2009 6:12:00 AM
This is so well done my friend..I can feel the innocence in the piece and you wrote this very well, making the reader live in the moment that you are reliving. So well done. Best wishes.
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Date: 2/22/2009 6:12:00 AM
Robin read Soup mail..please
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